Talk:A Room with No View/GA1

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Reviewer: Crisco 1492 (talk · contribs) 08:48, 3 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take this! — Crisco 1492 (talk) 08:48, 3 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Checklist

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
	1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	See below
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
	2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.	Fine
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).	Fine
	2c. it contains no original research.	Fine
	3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.	Good
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.	Per definition
	6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.	Fine
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.	Fine
	7. Overall assessment.	Pending

Discussion

1

""A Room With No View" featured an appearance by recurring guest star Sarah-Jane Redmond." - You discuss a returning villain in the second paragraph. Anything to do with Redmond?
Same person, clarified now. GRAPPLE X 19:42, 3 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Why nothing about the production in the lede?
The mention of Redmond's recurring role was meant to fulfil that, guess it could do with more. Let me know what it looks like now. GRAPPLE X 19:42, 3 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Who plays Gordon?
Added. GRAPPLE X 19:42, 3 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
tells him she loves him. - Tells Bryce or the unnamed man?
Bryce was the intended subject here but it is both at different times. I've clarified it. GRAPPLE X 19:42, 3 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
comforted - Is this right? Or does she confront him?
Yep, comforted. It's a bit creepy. GRAPPLE X 19:42, 3 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
The episode was the first to have been written by producer Ken Horton, and his only solo writing credit. - Which episode?
Redmond, admittedly a fan of Carter and recurring series director David Nutter, had initially auditioned for another episode of the first season - You didn't mention Chris Carter yet, so Carter comes out of nowhere. Don't forget his role in the episode.
Good catch. GRAPPLE X 19:42, 3 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I copyedited, be sure to check.
Looks good, thanks. GRAPPLE X 19:42, 3 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

3

Nothing whatsoever about themes?
Nothing as yet. There's a new book on the horizon which might help, not sure what's actually in it or not. GRAPPLE X 19:42, 3 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Spotchecks turn up no issues. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:06, 3 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for taking a look at this one for me. GRAPPLE X 19:42, 3 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Further discussion

On hold to fix issues indicated above. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:06, 3 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Alright, looks peachy. Passing. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 22:58, 3 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]