Talk:August (Fringe episode)/GA1

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Reviewer: Queenieacoustic (talk) 10:30, 6 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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Plot

Done In an attempt to save her,... Since her name hasn't been mentioned for a while, you should probably refer to her with her name here.

Besides that, the section is very well-written; it really felt like I was reading a good story. Kudos to you!

Production

Done ...and that in the season's eight episode,... Should it be "eighth" or "eight episodes"?

Reception

Done Josh Wigler from MTV.com thought the episode was "a touching, sad tale with a healthy mix of mythological advancement," and couldn't wait for more episodes on the Observers. (1) MTV shouldn't be italicized. Only italicize magazine titles. (2) "on the Observers" sounds awkward, write "about" instead.
Done Ramsey Isler of IGN gave the episode 7.6/10, writing that despite the "hype," the episode was "just plain average". He did however appreciate the new revelations about the Observers. IGN shouldn't be italicized. Also, I don't think "hype" needs to be in quotation marks.
Done ...Ken Tucker graded the episode an A-... Why is "A-" italicized?
Done ..."good story peppered with a lot of great details... "August" showed a greater connection to the larger Fringe universe". Remember to use single quotation marks (') when quoting text inside quotes.
Done Noel Murray of The A.V. Club graded the episode a B+, praised the "wonderfully moody" episode and how it was able to make the halting Observer dialogue work. "B+" shouldn't be italicized. Also, "the episode" is mentioned twice in a very narrow range. For example, you could write: ...praised it for being "wonderfully moody" etc.
Done Remember to write (pictured) after "Anna Torv" in the image caption. Queenieacoustic (talk) 16:06, 6 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Done "August" is the eighth episode of the second season of the American science fiction drama television series Fringe. Write "...Fringe's second season" instead.

Remember that you only need to source the extent of the material taken from the source, rather then source each sentence that uses the same source. For example, the two last sentences in the second paragraph of the Production section are from the same source, so you only need to source the last sentence.

This is normally true, but not if direct quotes are used. I am attributing Michael Cerveris' quote with a ref directly after the sentence. Ruby2010 comment! 16:20, 7 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I didn't know that, thanks for telling me! I'll remember it in the future. Queenieacoustic (talk) 16:39, 7 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

And that's pretty much it, not too much to complain about since the article is written well. I'll put it on hold for seven days so that the issues can be fixed. Queenieacoustic (talk) 10:30, 6 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review! I'll make the changes later tomorrow (Saturday). Thanks, Ruby2010 comment! 11:46, 6 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I made the fixes requested above. Thanks again for the review! Ruby2010 comment! 16:20, 7 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Well done! GA. Queenieacoustic (talk) 16:39, 7 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]