Talk:Eye movement in reading/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Crisco 1492 (talk · contribs) 07:20, 7 December 2011 (UTC)

• I will do this review over the next day or so. Crisco 1492 (talk) 07:20, 7 December 2011 (UTC)

Checklist

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
	1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	See below
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.	See below
	2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.	See below
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).	See below
	2c. it contains no original research.
	3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.	See below
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).	Fine
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.	See below
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.	Stable within definition.
	6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.	Good. A video would be nice.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.	Captions should be more concise
	7. Overall assessment.	Pending

Comments

1a

• The text reads like a text-book. Due to previous paraphrasing issues, it would be preferable if you do a rewrite to make the text less similar to the source text.

1b

• Per Wikipedia MOS guidelines, we should not repeat the title of the article in the section headers

2a

• You need to standardize the formatting of your references. Note how in the last paragraph of the text you have both footnotes and in-text citations. Footnotes are preferred.

3a

• Is there a distinction between left-to-right languages like English, right-to-left languages like Arabic, and up-to-down languages like Mandarin? This should be discussed.

4

• Example:

2b

• Some paragraphs are entirely unreferenced. For example, the second paragraph of the first section.

• On hold pending major fixes. Crisco 1492 (talk) 07:41, 7 December 2011 (UTC)