Talk:Raid on Saint-Paul/GA1

GA Review

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Hi! I will be reviewing this article for GAN, and should have the full review up soon. Skinny87 (talk) 17:45, 2 November 2008 (UTC)

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

   • 'The Raid on Saint Paul was an amphibious operation by a combined' - Adding 'conducted' after 'operation' sounds better
   • 'The operation was a complete success, British storming parties capturing the batteries overlooking the port allowing a naval squadron under Commodore Josias Rowley to enter the bay and capture the shipping in the harbour.' - 'which allowed a navval squadron' seems better gramatically
   • 'Although the attack was ultimately unsuccessful, Otter's captain Nesbit Willoughby was only able to break into and out of the harbour with great difficulty' - This doesn't quite make sense and needs rewording - removing the 'Although' will probably help

Should have been "without difficulty".--Jackyd101 (talk) 21:09, 2 November 2008 (UTC)

1. • 'Feretier was dissuaded from attempting to reach Port Louis by Rowley's blockading squadron however and instead put his ships into Saint Paul on Île Bonaparte to unload his captured vessels and replenish his supplies.[3]' - Dissauded seems an odd word to use - prevented may be better. And you need a comma after 'however'
   • 'At 05:00 on 21 September 1809, Nereide surreptitiously entered the bay of Saint Paul' - Surreptitiously isn't the right word really, especially for a ship - rmoving it would be a good idea.

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

   'At 05:00 on 21 September 1809, Nereide surreptitiously entered the bay of Saint Paul and successfully landed the British force, without any sign they had been sighted from the shore, at Point de Galet' - Needs a citation once you've removed the word I suggested above

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

An excellent and informative article, which only needs a few things done to it to bring it up to GA standard in my eyes. Good luck! Skinny87 (talk) 17:45, 2 November 2008 (UTC)

Thanks, I think I've done all of the above, hopefully this is OK.--Jackyd101 (talk) 21:09, 2 November 2008 (UTC)