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Reviewer: Redtigerxyz Talk 05:34, 23 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

This is a big article, so it may take me some time to reviews:

But Fath Ali Shah was not from the Pahlavi Dynasty, right??? --Redtigerxyz Talk 02:45, 24 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
You are right. The name of the file is incorrect. The image does not belong to Fat'h Ali Shah--WIMYV? (talk) 03:54, 24 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
I am replacing this image with more accurate image as name is incorrect per ref and the encyclopaedic accuracy will be doubted. --Redtigerxyz Talk 06:08, 28 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

--Redtigerxyz Talk 06:06, 23 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

--Redtigerxyz Talk 06:15, 23 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

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  • Avoid including galleries in articles, as per Wikipedia:Galleries. Common solutions to this problem include moving the gallery to wikicommons or integrating images with the text.[?]
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What about using {{Infobox Coat of arms}}. --Redtigerxyz Talk 06:17, 25 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Good idea. I will add it tonight--WIMYV? (talk) 15:59, 25 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
 Done--WIMYV? (talk) 22:15, 25 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, Redtigerxyz Talk 06:21, 23 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

  • Stable (5): checkY. --Redtigerxyz Talk 06:32, 23 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • WP:LEAD: since the lead of this article is a repetition of information also in the body, citations are not needed. e.g " became a popular symbol in Iran in the 12th century" need not cited in the lead as it is cited ahead. Please remove all such citations. Otherwise, the lead is agod summary
  • Broad in its coverage (3a) checkY --Redtigerxyz Talk 06:39, 23 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • The quotes: In some places like "The ancient connection of the sun god..... the comparison and the subsequent identification.", the quotes make no sense. A summary of a quote would be better. A summary of a quote would be better for the decrees. The article may be perceived as a {{Quotefarm}}. Please convert the quotes to text for a smooth flow in reading.  Done I converted unnecessary quotes to text.--WIMYV? (talk) 01:42, 24 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

--Redtigerxyz Talk 06:58, 23 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

the big quotes in decree published in 1846 can be removed. --Redtigerxyz Talk 02:55, 24 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
I'd rather keep that decree. This decree is the turning point of the Lion and Sun history. Most sources quoted that decree including the Encyclopedic article of Lion and Sun in Iranica.--WIMYV? (talk) 03:54, 24 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
OK. What about references??? After you link the correct Encyclopedia Iranica link, I want to check for WP:OR on a sample basis. --Redtigerxyz Talk 04:10, 24 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
I fixed the link to Encyclopedia Iranica. Most of materials from this source were added by a user before I start completing the article. However, I checked them and I believe there is no OR--WIMYV? (talk) 04:47, 24 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Closing comments
  • I am also removing some more images as the article was tending to be more like an image gallery, IMO. I suggest you to remove images, finally eliminating all galleries as well as restricting images to 1 or 2 per section to avoid image crowding
  • Checked some online ref on sample basis, No OR.

Result: PASS. Congrats. Good work. --Redtigerxyz Talk 06:15, 28 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]