Talk:Vow (song)/GA1

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Reviewer: AJona1992 (talk · contribs) 03:48, 27 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this article shortly. Best, Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 03:48, 27 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from AJona1992

Infobox: "Released" needs a {{start date}} template
Infobox: "Length" needs a {{duration}} template
Tell me why does this sentence "Vow" is a 1994 song written, recorded and produced by alternative rock band Garbage and was released as their debut single in early 1995. is constructed like this? Please look at other GA song articles for a better approach.
Delink "Los Angeles and Seattle"
Delink Australia
Delink United States
Billboard needs to be in italics --> Billboard Hot 100
Delink greatest hits
"Vow" began in rough demo form in January, 1994 - not a great start, very weak prose
Delink Wisconsin
Delink Audition
Manson eventually returned to Smart - who is Smart? I know its Smart Studios but you add it here as if its a person
"for a successful second time" - why not just a say "for a second try" it borders WP:OR
Delink lyrics
Delink violence
Delink psychological
Lyrically, Manson claimed ""Vow" is about having feelings [of vengeance]. You have to face your feelings of revenge and work out why you feel that way. It's about that conundrum when you're really angry but in reality you're in a pitiful state. Angry, twisted, but deep down, vulnerable" - a period is missing (at the end)
Delink genre (music)
I'm going to stop here. This article was nominated prematurely, there are far far too many WP:COMMONWORDs that are linked throughout this article. Also, "Single release" for chart positions/peaks does not follow WP:ORDINAL at all, there are also many words linked twice (like their debut album). "Commercial track listings" does not follow simple WP:MoS. Moreover, File:GarbageVowvideo.JPG does not comply WP:NFCC its rational is very very weak and does not give a suitable reasoning on why a non-free video shot gives any educational value. I am most certain that File:GarbageVowInternational.png fails WP:NFCC and I also asked a more experienced user [1] about it. Also the "Reference" is a mess, publications are not italicized while one title is in capitalization, which is not supposed to be (even if the website presents itself as such). I suggest you fixed all concerns, get it copy edited, allow others to give it a WP:PR and then re-nominate. Best, Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 22:57, 27 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Also please look at this discussion about the second cover. Best, Jona yo! ^{Selena 4 ever} 17:17, 29 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]