Wikipedia:WikiProject Television/The X-Files task force/A-Class review/Field Trip

The following is an archived discussion of an A-Class nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in the main page's talk page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was approved by TRLIJC19 01:22, 3 November 2012 (UTC) [1].[reply]

Field Trip

Nominator(s): Gen. Quon (Talk) 01:13, 20 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Leave comments here for an A-Class assessment! Thanks.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 01:13, 20 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"The episode's teleplay was written by John Shiban and Vince Gilligan, from a story by Frank Spotnitz, and was directed by Kim Manners" -> drop "episode's teleplay" for just "episode"; as it is, the "was directed by" is still applying to the teleplay and not the episode as a whole. It's readily implied when someone else gets a story credit that the "written by" means the script itself.
Per WP:TVPLOT we could lose about 100 words from the summary; try to look for adjectives or for phrases that could be replaced with briefer ones or single words.
"what we did comically last season in 'Bad Blood'"." -> double quote marks around "Bad Blood", per MOS, would be an acceptable typographic change.
In the production heading, there's a few instances of consecutive uses of the same citation; if a sentence has a quote then this is fine but two quote-free sentences in a row can share a cite to neaten things up a little.
The quotebox and image facing each other under "Research, filming, and effects" should be moved, text shouldn't be squeezed between two floating objects like this (generally it's two images which cause this but the effect is the same). Just move either one or the other down a paragraph or two so they're staggered rather than facing.
"Bill Millar captured video of Gillian Anderson and David Duchovny in three-dimensional high-definition video: The two actors were scanned with a special laser at Glendale, California and the results were manipulated by a computer" -> use an em dash rather than a colon here. Same applies elsewhere.
"The idea of alternative realities had been done in previous episode" -> "episode" to "episode", and change "done" to "explored/examined/portrayed", etc
The second and third paragraphs of "Themes" seem to split in the middle of a train of thought; a paragraph beginning "thus" is generally a bad thing as it hinges on something said previously.
Happy enough aside from these. I'll give the plot section another reading when it's trimmed to be sure it's okay but otherwise that's all. GRAPPLE X 16:09, 1 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

OK, I think I cleared everything. Please tell me if I missed anything.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:40, 2 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good. Support. GRAPPLE X 11:06, 2 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Support – Per the review above, and a thorough reading of the article. TRLIJC19 (talk • contribs) 01:21, 3 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

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