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GA Review

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Reviewer: Yellow Dingo (talk · contribs) 11:39, 5 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]


I'll take this. I should be done reviewing within a day or two. - Yellow Dingo (talk) 11:39, 5 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Review

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GA review
(see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):
    b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):
    b (citations to reliable sources):
    c (OR):
    d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):
    b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
    b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

Overall:
Pass/Fail:

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1a

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Lead
  • "with at least 25 boats sinking, with several people drowning after" → it reads weird repeating "with" maybe split into two sentences: "In early October, the sixth cyclone brought damage to Inagua in the Bahamas. At least 25 boats sunk, with several people drowning after one vessel capsized.
Hurricane 1
  • (165 km/h) – equivalent → (165 km/h) which is equivalent
Hurricane 2
  • "Existed in the northwestern Atlantic in the middle of August, the only evidence of the storm was reports from two vessels in the vicinity of bad weather." → "It existed in the northwestern Atlantic in the middle of August with the only evidence of the storm being reports from two vessels in the vicinity of bad weather."
Hurricane 3
  • "winds were estimated" → "winds are estimated"
Hurricane 4
  • Partagás - in the lead you don't have the accent on the "a"; keep it consistent
  • "As with the previous hurricane, no track existed for this storm until the 2000 HURDAT," - you say in H3 that the track was developed in 1995
Hurricane 5
  • "September 18, newspaper accounts" → "September 18, using newspaper accounts"
  • "reemerged" → "re-emerged"
  • "into the" → "in the"
  • "continued toward the" → "continued towards the"
  • "prior passing" → "prior to passing"
  • Unlink "Mobile" in the second paragraph as you linked it the first
  • "After a wharf was flooded, causing authorities to warn residents to seek higher ground." → "After a wharf was flooded, authorities warned residents to seek higher ground."
  • "The trains were" → "The train system was"
  • "at least $10,000" → "at least US$10,000"
  • "With over" → "With the storm causing over"
Hurricane 6
  • "signalling an intense" → "signalling it was an intense"
Tropical Storm 7
  • "suffered similar a fate" → "suffered a similar fate"
Hurricane 8
  • "reported to near Bermuda" → "reported near Bermuda"
  • "peak with winds" → "peak at winds"
  • "into extratropical cyclone" → "into an extratropical cyclone"
General

Final

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Nice work so far. Putting this on hold. - Yellow Dingo (talk) 07:56, 7 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Yellow Dingo: I've fixed or responded to all of the points you raised. Thanks for the review --12george1 (talk) 01:16, 8 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Ok nice work; passing. - Yellow Dingo (talk) 05:39, 8 September 2016 (UTC)[reply]