Talk:1973 FA Charity Shield/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: HawkAussie (talk · contribs) 00:34, 21 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

I sure pick up this one.

Hi HawkAussie, thanks for picking this up. I've (hopefully) addressed your first comments. Eem dik doun in toene (talk) 17:02, 27 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]

...and hit the Burnley crossbar through Alan Oakes - This feel likes it needs something before this part of the sentence.
- Reworded
In the 66th minute, they scored via a free-kick routine - What about changing to say something about like "Six minutes later,". Or if you want to keep the goal that was scored in the 66th minute, what about modifying the previous sentence to still indicate that Burnley dominated in the second half.
- Done
Doug Collins dummied to take the free-kick - Possibly need to change the word of dummied as some people might not know what that means.
- Reworded

...last match of the season, away at local rivals Preston North End. Burnley drew 1–1 with a goal from Colin Waldron - Possibly reword of that portion of the sentence to maybe include the following sentence in the previous sentence.
- Done
Was their any mention from the Manchester City manager at the time of the match or before it?
- Not that I've seen in the archives

...went in front when a powerful shot from Alan Oakes hit the Burnley crossbar. - That needs a comma possibly after Alan Oakes.
- I think the sentence reads better without a comma.
...afterwards Mike Doyle shot wide with the Burnley... - Another sentence that could be reworded.
- Done
During the opening 30 minutes Burnley regularly lost possession and... - Missing a comma after minutes.
- Added
...second half well and again pressed their opponents. - Again would need to be reworded here.
- Done
...played a one-two with Dobson, hit a powerful... - Could actually remove the comma after Dobson.
- Removed

...and were beaten in the final of the Football League Cup. - You could mention who they lost to?
- Done

For the reference relating to 11v11, you couldn't find another reference that might be suitable for that pre-match section?
- I've replaced the second use of the 11v11 ref in the pre-match section. This means that there is one left but the 11v11 ref captures all the info in that important sentence.

Ok, so just finish up with the match and the post match comments that I put in and this should be good to go. HawkAussie (talk) 00:06, 28 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks HawkAussie, I've addressed your comments. Eem dik doun in toene (talk) 09:05, 28 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]
  Congrats, good work as that is now a Good Article. HawkAussie (talk) 01:26, 30 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]