Talk:2013–14 Feyenoord season/GA1

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Reviewer: Good888 (talk · contribs) 11:35, 1 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Being a football fan, I am going to take a look at this:

Review and events

I would perfer that you merge some of these sub-sections together. The new sub-sections should be August–October, November–February and March–May.
"Feyenoord ended the pre-season preparation with a 3–1 home win over Getafe in its last friendly match ." I would remove "in its last friendly match" as you already stated that it ended the pre-season preparation with this match. Also what's with the space inbetween the full stop?
"The second leg of the Europa League play-off round was played 29 August at home in De Kuip, they lost 1–2 and were eliminated from the tournament." Rewrite to: "The second leg of the Europa League play-off round was played 29 August at home in De Kuip, where they lost 1–2 and were eliminated from the tournament."
"The club announced halfway through the month they had signed Otman Bakkal without transfer free." Without transfer free? Do you mean a transfer fee?
"Bakkal had played for Feyenoord in the 2011–12 season as well." Link the 2011-12 season. Also state the following: "Bakkal had played for Feyenoord in the 2011–12 season as well before joining Russian club Dynamo Moscow for the 2012–13 season."
"The team played Heracles Almelo at home the 27th" On the 27th you mean.
"due to a Vandepitte own goal" Link Vandepitte you haven't already.
"and further scores by Bakkal and Te Vrede." Change scores to goals.
"the final score was reached after AZ successfully converted a penalty." I would perfer you state that Jóhannsson converted the penalty rather than AZ.
"The visitors took an early lead, Boëtius equalized the game in the first half stoppage time." Rewrite to: "The visitors took an early lead but Boëtius scored an equalizer in the first half stoppage time"
"The game ended as 2–1 win after Heerenveen got on the board at the stroke of half-time." As a 2-1 win you mean.
"Clasie scored the sixth Feyenoord penalty before Heracles' Rienstra missed" Link Rienstra.
"On 22 January, Feyenoord got knocked out of the KNVB Cup in the quarter-finals by Ajax." What was the score?
"On 2 March Feyenoord played Ajax at home, they lost the match 1–2 after taking a first-half lead." Rewrite to: "On 2 March Feyenoord played Ajax at home, where they lost 1-2 despite taking a first-half lead."
"They went on to win their third match in a row on 30 March at home against Go Ahead Eagles." State that they won 5-0 in this sentence.

Club

"This is Ronald Koeman's third season as manager of Feyenoord." Rewrite to: "This was Ronald Koeman's third and final season as manager of Feyenoord."
"March 2013 it was announced that Feyenoord signed a four-year deal" On March 2013 you mean.
"The home jersey was similar to the previous season version with updated sponsor name." With an updated sponsor name.

References

Refs 24 and 73 are broken.

Going to place on hold for now seeing as there are lots of issues that need to be addressed. good888 (talk) 11:35, 1 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your in-depth review. Due to the holidays I don't have time in the next couple of days to fix these issues, would you consider extending the hold period a bit? Thanks! CRwikiCA talk 20:07, 1 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

That's fine by me. good888 (talk) 15:50, 2 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

@Good888: I addressed the points you brought up. Reference 73 seems to work for me now though, so I did not change it. Let me know if you would have any additional concerns. Thanks! CRwikiCA talk 19:40, 6 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Works now. Odd it didn't at first. Anyway, promoting to GA class. Well done. good888 (talk) 20:27, 6 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Great, thanks for your review! CRwikiCA talk 20:55, 6 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]