Talk:911 (Lady Gaga song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: GagaNutella (talk · contribs) 16:11, 18 February 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Lead/Top

Infobox is ok;
Switch funk and techno;
The word along is repetitive, please change one sentence;
Add a comma after the United States.

Recording and release

Add a comma after while Gaga was recording "911".

Lyrical content and composition

Add the "Can't Get You Out of My Head"'s release year in brackets.

Chart performance

I do not think is necessary to list all those countries. It gets repetitive. Remove some of them;
Link the Italy peak to its certification, for example: at number 92 in Italy, being certified Gold by the Federazione Industria Musicale Italiana (FIMI) for selling over 35,000 units.

Music video

- the same symbol from the cover art of Chromatica - → — the same symbol from the cover art of Chromatica —;
Wikilink Pitchfork.

Remixes

Do not wl Pitchfork;
Add the Pop 2's release year in brackets.

References

Ref 4: add |trans-title= and |language= parameters;
Ref 5: add |trans-title= parameter; I do not think Radio Airplay Italia is in italics;
Ref 14: add |url-access= parameter;
Ref 19: add |url-access= parameter;
Ref 28: add |url-access= parameter;
Ref 48: wl HRT;
Ref 51: add |trans-title= parameter;
Ref 52: add |trans-title= parameter;

I've followed your recent edits to this article and I can say that your work has been incredible. About the copy violation, even with the high percentage of EW, it is fine because of the use of blockquote. Try to reduce the percentage of Insider, Variety, and HuffPost. On hold for 7 days. GagaNutella^talk 16:11, 18 February 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for the help. I've addressed all your notes, and also shortened the Chart section a bit.

As for Variety and Huffpost, the similarites were all direct qutoes from Gaga, so I couldn't get rid of them.

With the Insider article, though, quite some sentences were identical with parts of the synopsis at the Music video section. I rephrased those sentences as much as I could. (The rewritten sentences are: "Later in the video, Gaga appears in a black leather jumpsuit decorated with flowers, which covers her whole body. ... Gaga begins to cry and wail, waking up in the real world, where she is seen lying outside of a cinema, where a big sign advertises an "Armenian Film Festival". Paramedics shock her back to life after being hurt in a car-bicycle accident. While the doctors are tending to her she looks bewildered and screams out, 'I didn’t have pain pills'.") Sricsi (talk) 13:44, 19 February 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Passing. Again, an amazing job! GagaNutella^talk 13:56, 19 February 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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