Talk:Bukit Kutu/GA2

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Reviewer: Guettarda (talk · contribs) 14:10, 27 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

This looks interesting. I'll review it. Guettarda (talk) 14:10, 27 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

After the first "kilometres" you can abbreviate them to "km". I recommend adding the parameter |abbr=on in the {{convert}}. If you don't, you should use |adj=on in places like the second sentence get 15.3-kilometre (9.5 mi) bridle path instead of the grammatically incorrect 15.3 kilometres (9.5 mi) bridle path

Done WPSamson (talk) 04:26, 30 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Third sentence: and the British government acquired the station's bungalows. Was it actually the British government, or perhaps the government of the Federated Malay States? If you aren't sure (the source just says "the government", unless I missed something more specific), I think "the government of British Malaya would probably work. But I'm pretty sure the government of the United Kingdom (which is where that link leads) did not acquire the hill station.

I am not entirely sure which "government" in the reference refers to, In sentence, at the moment replaced with "government of British Malaya". WPSamson (talk) 04:26, 30 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

You say Because of safety precautions... and Despite the trail's dangers..., but you don't say what the safety precautions or the dangers are. The first one could be As a safety precaution... but if you start with "because of" or "despite" the implication is that you are referencing something that came before.

Done rewritten as due to risks of lost inside the trail. WPSamson (talk) 04:26, 30 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

In July 2017, another hiker from Egypt... - unless there was a previous hiker from Egypt, you should just say something like "a hike from Egypt", or "another hiker, this one from Egypt". And if there was a previous hiker from Egypt, you should mention them before the "another".

Done There is only one hiker from Egypt with this incident. WPSamson (talk) 04:26, 30 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

For instance, seven variants of mosquitoes - do you mean variants, or do you mean species or subspecies? "Variant" usually implies something less than a subspecies.

Done replaced to "subspecies". WPSamson (talk) 04:26, 30 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

@Guettarda: I had done improve the article based on your suggestion. Can have a check on the article before finalize for the GA. WPSamson (talk) 04:26, 30 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]