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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 18:34, 4 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]


  • Link North Sea
  • Link Yorkshire at the first mention, not the second
  • "Flying another Spitfire, he had to make a forced landing when his engine was damaged following an encounter with Bf 109s over Biggin Hill" - This still on August 31?
  • "Gray was promoted to flight lieutenant in August 1941,[26] The same month" - Looks like this comma should probably be a period.
  • "Gray spent a short period of time at No. 485 Squadron, largely made up of New Zealand flying personnel before taking command of No. 64 Squadron," - Comma after personnel
  • "which was based in Algeria and was the first unit in the Middle East to fly the Spitfire Mk. IX" - Algeria isn't really in the Middle East
  • "Although he made no official claim for this encounter,[30], " - Drop the second comma
  • Link George VI.
  • Link Buckingham Palace
  • If his command served at Arnhem, should Market Garden be added to the list of campaigns in the infobox?
  • Is there a link for secondment? If not, can you briefly gloss it?
  • Is cause of death known?
  • Given the relative length of the article, the lead's a bit on the short side.
  • While the DNZB source gives date of death as 1 August, the Independent gives 2 August

That's about it. Placing on hold for these to be sorted out. Hog Farm Bacon 15:08, 5 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review. I have actioned the above and made a few comments as well. Zawed (talk) 08:17, 7 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]