Talk:Crystal Dunn/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: REDMAN 2019 (talk · contribs) 12:14, 22 February 2021 (UTC)

I will have a look at this. Review coming soon. REDMAN 2019 (talk) 12:14, 22 February 2021 (UTC)

Infobox

• Are there any sources for her appearances and goals at U-17, U-18 and U-20 level with the national team?

• Not able to locate stats for these teams. Hmlarson (talk) 00:18, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

Early life

• Refs 5 and 6 say that the page doesn't exist, this means that most of the first paragraph is now unreferenced. New refs will be needed.

Y appears to have been fixed. Hmlarson (talk) 00:46, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

• There should probably be more then one ref for the last 3 paragraphs. Even is it's just supporting what is said.

Y updated. Hmlarson (talk) 00:46, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

University of North Carolina, 2010–2013

• "She led the team with 14 goals and 34 points, including six match-winning goals" This could be much clearer. Was she the top goalscorer?, did she get the points or was it the clubs total? And do the match winning goals need mentioning?

Y Slightly modified. Yes, match-winning goals are an important differentiator. Hmlarson (talk) 00:49, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

Washington Spirit, 2014–2017

• "She made 19 starts for the Spirit in her 22 appearances for the club during the 2014 season." Ref needed.

Y done. Hmlarson (talk) 00:54, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

• Ref 25 needs author, date and accessdate

Y done. Hmlarson (talk) 00:54, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

• Link the 2015 world cup to 2015 FIFA Women's World Cup.

Y done. Hmlarson (talk) 00:54, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

Chelsea, 2017–2018

• This section could do with some expanding, even if it's just a summary of the season.

North Carolina Courage, 2018–2020

• "a trade with Washington Spirit for two of North Carolina's players" North Carolina has been linked to the state instead of the club.

Y updated. Hmlarson (talk) 01:02, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

• "Dunn was named Player of the Week twice in the 2018 NWSL season, for weeks 8 and 13." I don't see any mention of the week 8 award in the source.

Y added ref for week 8. Hmlarson (talk) 01:02, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

• "The Courage broke the record for most goals scored in a season." not mentioned in the ref for that sentence.

Y added ref + modified sentence to include multiple records broken. Hmlarson (talk) 01:02, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

• Ref 38 seems to have the wrong title.

Can you clarify which ref? Hmlarson (talk) 01:02, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

Don't worry. It seems to have been fixed. REDMAN 2019 (talk) 11:46, 10 March 2021 (UTC)

• What year/season is the final paragraph talking about?

2018. I combined the paragraphs. Hmlarson (talk) 01:02, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

Portland Thorns, 2020-

• Has she made her debut yet? If so then it should be updated.

She hasn't - she joined in October 2020, and since then Thorns haven't played a match, with the 2021 season scheduled to start in May. --SuperJew (talk) 10:57, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

Youth national teams

• Is the lengthy caption for the 2012 FIFA U-20 World Cup image nessercery?

Y Modified. Hmlarson (talk) 01:17, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

• "Dunn has competed on behalf of the United States in various national youth teams from 2008 through 2012, including at the 2008 FIFA U-17 Women's World Cup." Ref needed.

Y Ref added. Hmlarson (talk) 01:17, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

• The number of U-20 caps that she won should probably be mentioned here given that she is one of the leaders in terms of appearances.

Y Modified. Hmlarson (talk) 01:17, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

• "She was in the 2010 FIFA U-20 Women's World Cup in Germany and was a member of the team that won the 2012 FIFA U-20 Women's World Cup in Japan." Ref needed here too.

Y ref added. Hmlarson (talk) 01:17, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

Senior national team

• Link 2013 Algarve Cup to 2013 Algarve Cup

Y Done. Hmlarson (talk) 00:14, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

• Refs 50 and 53 aren't available. Replacements need to be found.

Y Fixed. Thanks Superjew. Hmlarson (talk) 00:14, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

• The image of her in 2014 should probably be smaller.

Seems fine. Same width as photo above. Perhaps Superjew already got this. Hmlarson (talk) 00:14, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

I didn't touch the photo width 😅 --SuperJew (talk) 09:17, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

International goals

• !scope=row needed for the goal number.

Y Fixed --SuperJew (talk) 14:33, 10 March 2021 (UTC)

Honours

• "Top Drawer Soccer Player of the Year Award: 2012" Ref needed.

Y removed Hmlarson (talk) 00:10, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

References

• Most of the references don't have accessdates. Try to get them all filled in.

Y done. Hmlarson (talk) 01:42, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

• Refs 5,6 and 9 are no longer available. If no archive urls can be found they will need replacing.

Y done. Hmlarson (talk) 01:51, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

• Ref 10 needs publishing date.

Y done. Hmlarson (talk) 01:51, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

• Ref 12, 13, 16, 17 and 18 need both publishing dates and accessdates.

Y done. Hmlarson (talk) 01:51, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

• Ref 15 redirects to the homepage.
• Refs 34 and 35 need publisher and author added.
• Ref 36 needs publisher.
• Ref 39 needs date
• Ref 42 needs date and author.
• Refs 51, 79 and 80 need authors.

• • @REDMAN 2019 and Hmlarson: Y I have done a full run-through of all refs on page (including those added in Hmlarson's recent edits). All issues above should've been taken care of (but it's hard to be entirely sure, as the ref numbers changed around a bit). --SuperJew (talk) 10:50, 9 March 2021 (UTC)

To Do

• Expand lead
• Expand Chelsea
• Expand Thorns to note 2020 season.
• Add Courage 2019 season
• Add 2019 FIFA World Cup section; re-organize senior international
• Add Style of Play
• Expand In Popular Culture

Comments

This is quite a large review. Most of the issues are with the references, which are missing authors, dates and accessdates. They all need to be as complete as possible. I am putting this on hold until the issues have been fixed. I will be having a look at this page every couple of days but you can ping me if you have finished and want feedback and I will replay as soon as possible. Good luck! REDMAN 2019 (talk) 14:46, 22 February 2021 (UTC)

Final points

• The goals table still needs !scope=row.

Y Fixed. --SuperJew (talk) 14:33, 10 March 2021 (UTC)

• The Chelsea section is still very small. And makes no mention of what happened that season apart from her playing in a FA Cup game.

Y Expanded. --SuperJew (talk) 15:08, 10 March 2021 (UTC)

• There are still few references without accessdates. This can be fixed quite easily as you basically just need to add the current date.

Out of the 100 references, 75 have an accessdate. The other 25 are archived versions, and therefore don't need an accessdate, since the archive date functions as an accessdate too. --SuperJew (talk) 13:18, 10 March 2021 (UTC)

• Somethings wrong with refs 46, 50, and 51. I'm getting Error 503

I'm not sure what the problem is. It opens fine on my computer. --SuperJew (talk) 14:28, 10 March 2021 (UTC)

• Try to avoid ALLCAPS. Like in ref 74.

Y Fixed. --SuperJew (talk) 14:28, 10 March 2021 (UTC)

After that I think I will be able to promote this. REDMAN 2019 (talk) 12:05, 10 March 2021 (UTC)

The refs still give me a error but maybe that's just me. Apart form that everything seems to be in order and I am happy to promote this. REDMAN 2019 (talk) 13:33, 11 March 2021 (UTC)

Thank you for your review and time REDMAN 2019! --SuperJew (talk) 15:27, 11 March 2021 (UTC)

No problem. Cheers! REDMAN 2019 (talk) 11:32, 12 March 2021 (UTC)