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GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Edouard Izac/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Eddie891 (talk · contribs) 12:57, 18 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I'll be taking this on. Please ping me when responding on this page, so it doesn't get lost in my ~3,500 page watchlist... Eddie891 Talk Work 12:57, 18 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Sounds good! @Eddie891: I figure I'll get to it once you finish the review. Is this the case? Thanks! —Ed!(talk) 03:03, 29 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Ed!, Done! Eddie891 Talk Work 16:24, 30 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Ed!: any update on responding to my prose comments? If you don't agree with them, just say that, and I will happily pass Eddie891 Talk Work 23:19, 22 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Ahh! My apologies! Kinda fell through the cracks. I'll get to this in the next few days or the weekend. —Ed!(talk) 18:28, 23 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
@Eddie891: Thank you for the patience! I've responded to everything below now. —Ed!(talk) 15:44, 1 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Ed!, Thanks! sorry for dragging this on so long. happy to approve! Great work! Eddie891 Talk Work 02:02, 2 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Sources

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  • AGF on offline sources, if you intend to take it further, reviewers may request scans of the pages.
  • If you inline cite the United States Congress Biographical Dictionary, that's fine, but then it shouldn't be listed in the "references" section
  1. Fixed. —Ed!(talk) 20:33, 7 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Prose

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  • experiences touring concentration camps changed some of his views this could hardly be more vague. Clarify?
  • standardize year formats (be consistent between mdy or dmy)
  • Interested in learning from a young age perhaps remove.
  • recommendation from a Congressman in Chicago who was the congressman?
  • clarify what war he's fighting in in the article body
  • he signed up for the Naval Transport Service a date would be useful here for context
  • Abraham Lincoln rolled starboard is this referring to the President Lincoln, or a different ship.
  • especially for the Russian prisoners of war why is this necessary?
    • Gives the context that the POW situation in that camp, especially as he watched treatment of others, motivated him to continue to attempt to escape. —Ed!(talk) 15:44, 1 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • d to a plum post as the instead of 'plum', use a more NPOV and accessible description.
  • hese retellings gained an audience and he was noted for his animation. is this necessary?
    • As I can tell, it's one of few hints in the sources that give some context of his personality and how he presented himself while campaigning, which is missing amid his biographical activities and interests. —Ed!(talk) 15:44, 1 June 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • Running again in 1936, Izac changed his strategy and used his war record and Medal of Honor award as selling points in his political campaign. He retold the story of his capture in rallies at auditoriums, schools and in the streets. These retellings gained an audience and he was noted for his animation. perhaps rephrase as "Campaigning again in 1936, Izac changed his strategy and used his war record and Medal of Honor award as selling points in his political campaign. He retold the story of his capture in various rallies, becoming noted for his animation while speaking."
  • the New York Times. only the times?
  • here are the copyedits I made. Feelfree to revert any or all. Eddie891 Talk Work 16:24, 30 March 2019 (UTC)[reply]

General

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A drive by comment

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It may be helpful to give his term as a representative in the lead. (Just a thought.) A nice article, IMHO. Gog the Mild (talk) 22:16, 11 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Feels like it would be inconsistent to do so without also doing so for the Navy service, based on current sentence structure. Adding both would make it start to run on. —Ed!(talk) 03:50, 14 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
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