Talk:Edward Elric/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Xtzou (Talk) 19:03, 6 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I am reviewing this article. I think it is very well done and have only a few questions:

"Edward behaves in a childish manner about his short height; he tends to humorously overreact to any comment about it (and often misinterprets the words) in a fit of rage" - he is "humorous" and "in a fit of rage" at the same time? Or how does that work?
- Removed humorous. It works like a comic relief in the series.Tintor2 (talk) 19:14, 6 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"Despite his occasional bouts of immaturity, he is a selfless, strong, independent and mature young adult that gains a reputation as a "hero of the people"." - How can he be immature and mature at the same time? I assume that he shifts between seeming immature and mature.
- Fixed.Tintor2 (talk) 19:14, 6 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"Edward's childhood friend, Winry Rockbell, designed Edward's automail limbs alongside her grandmother Pinako." What does "alongside her grandmother" mean?
- Fixed.Tintor2 (talk) 19:14, 6 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"allows Edward to float between the comical moments and the underlying drama without seeming false." - This is word for word from the source. The wording should be changed, or it should be put in quotes.
- Fixed.Tintor2 (talk) 19:14, 6 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I will put the article on hold while you address these issues. Thanks, Xtzou (Talk) 19:03, 6 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose quality: Well written

B. MoS compliance: Complies with the basic MoS
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. References to sources: Sources are reliable

B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary: Well referenced

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects: Sets the context

B. Focused: Remains focused on topic
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail: Pass!