Talk:Eilish Cleary

Eilish Cleary is currently a Biology and medicine good article nominee. Nominated by B3251_(talk) at 02:04, 10 July 2024 (UTC)

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The result was: promoted by AirshipJungleman29 talk 11:35, 12 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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... that Eilish Cleary's role as Chief Medical Officer of Health in New Brunswick was controversially terminated while studying glyphosate, a herbicide that is widely used in the province's industries?

Source: https://www.theglobeandmail.com/canada/article-former-nb-chief-medical-officer-eilish-cleary-was-a-fearless-defender/ & https://www.cbc.ca/news/canada/new-brunswick/eilish-cleary-health-settlement-1.4191543

Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Myinsaing
Comment: I'm not totally confident in the hook, so feel free to offer feedback or suggestions on whether it can be used or not. Thanks!

Created by B3251 (talk). Number of QPQs required: 1. Nominator has 17 past nominations.

B3251_(talk) 21:11, 7 July 2024 (UTC).[reply]

The article is long enough, new enough, and is neutral with no copyright violations. A QPQ has been completed. I think that the hook is fine. SL93 (talk) 22:14, 24 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review

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Nominator: B3251 (talk · contribs) 02:04, 10 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Actuall7 (talk · contribs) 06:41, 15 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

This is my first time reviewing an article so I apologize in advance if there are any mistakes. I would also appreciate advice for reviewing better. Actuall7 (talk) 06:41, 15 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hello there, thanks for the review. I'll make changes as I go by and ping you when complete. B3251_(talk) 15:00, 16 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Putting page on hold for now until issues are adressed. Actuall7 (talk) 00:59, 16 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

initial checks

Non-free usage rationale for the image seems okay.
Earwig gives a 42.2% chance of copyvio but most of it is from quotes from this article [1] and others so it isn't that concerning.

Lead

Minor problems in the lead.
Y ~~Not sure if physician should be wikilinked.~~
Y "termination in 2015 under a controversial decision by the provincial government." -> maybe rephrase to say "in 2015, following a controversial decision"?
"She later moved to Canada where she served as a public health official in Manitoba before moving to New Brunswick to work there. After her termination, Cleary worked as a public health official" -> Since she continued working as a public health official, reword to say: "After her termination, Cleary continued working as a public health official"
Y "physician, health officer and public health advocate" -> use Oxford comma for consistency as you use it at later parts of the article -> "physician, health officer, and public health advocate"

Early life and career

This section from public health career, "Cleary and her family moved to Canada in 1998. She initially lived and worked in Manitoba, where she served as the public health officer for the North Eastman Regional Health Authority and afterwards for the province.", can be moved to early life and career as this was still early into her career and life.
Is this citation [2], used in the sentence, "and afterwards for the province.", the best source to show that she became the province health officer? The source only refers to her as the province health officer and the article isn't even mainly about Cleary.

Public health in New Brunswick

"with the chief at the time being Wayne MacDonald." -> would it be easier to say "under then-chief Wayne MacDonald."? This is done later in the article: "then-health minister Ted Flemming"
"she was the acting chief, and by January 2009 she was" remove and add commas -> "she was the acting chief and, by January 2009, was"
"At this time, New Brunswick placed second in the country in the percentage of population vaccinated against H1N1 with a vaccination rate of 40%." -> perhaps reword this to reference Cleary? At the moment, it feels like a random line that isn't related to Cleary.
"Between 2014 and 2015" -> "Between 2014 to 2015" Unless the two trips were made seperately in 2014 and 2015

2015 termination

"then under control of the Liberal Party" simplify -> "then-controlled by the Liberal Party"
"who has voiced opposition" -> "who had voiced opposition" Also, is this referring to NB Power, J. D. Irving, or both of them opposing the ban?
J. D. Irving should be abbreviated to JDI and used throughout the article and is even referred to as JDI in this sentence: "falsely implied that J. D. Irving, Limited (JDI) is or was involved in some sort of conspiracy against Dr. Cleary because JDI uses glyphosate"
"the article's comments section insinuated" -> Comment section does not need to be wikilinked.
"J. D. Irving spokeswoman Mary Keith" -> "JDI's spokeswoman Mary Keith"
"Coon, a friend of Cleary's who "often consulted with her about public health issues" " not sure if it is necessary to mention this quote, instead just mention the fact that they were friends.
"According to health minister Victor Boudreau" should be then-health minister as Victor is no longer the health minister according to his article.
Y ~~"herself, The Daily Gleaner and The Globe and Mail." should use the Oxford comma -> "herself, The Daily Gleaner, and The Globe and Mail."~~
Y "by the provincial government, and that her" and "was "hush money", and part" unnecessary commas

Will add more later. Actuall7 (talk) 12:19, 15 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Continuing review. Actuall7 (talk) 00:48, 16 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Post-termination career

"listed as "physician" by Service New Brunswick" -> not sure if physician should be wikilinked.
"serve as a "federal public health adviser on aboriginal issues"." Is this quote necessary? Why not just say "hired Cleary as a federal public health adviser."?
"other provinces, and as a physician." unnecessary comma.
"large flood along the Saint John River" -> "large flood that occured along the Saint John River"
" "the need for strong environmental impact assessments and watershed protection is important because looking at contamination of river water after the fact is a heartbreaking situation for people, with a lot of damage done"." and ""hadn't sufficiently warned of the dangers"." -> These quotes are unreferenced.

Awards and honors

No problems in the awards and honors section, except that the Queen Elizabeth II Diamond Jubilee Medal is unreferenced. Maybe reference it with [33]?
- [33] is used to reference the entire section of text past [32], including her Queen Elizabeth II Diamond Jubilee Medal. The specific text is She was awarded the Queens Diamond Jubilee Medal by the lieutenant-governor of New Brunswick in 2013 for her services to the people of Canada. I'm not sure why I used the same citation twice in a row though, I've moved that back. If it was the specific medal name in the quote that caught you off guard, the source just used an alternative, less specific name of the same medal. The Queen's Diamond Jubilee Medal only refers to two medals depending on which queen was reigning when they were presented. B3251_(talk) 15:42, 16 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Personal life and death

"named Paul Meyer, with whom" unnecessary comma.
"and later divorced around her termination" why not just say in 2015?
"with whom she lived in Penniac" -> "with whom she lived with in Penniac"

References

Most references are from reliable Canadian news sources.
I am unable to access [17] but it seems to be from J. D. Irving themselves, so I am unsure of its reliability, can you let me know if it's reliable?
- It's just a direct reference to the statement in question so that the relevant quotes are accounted for. Try this archive link: https://web.archive.org/web/20240708183255/https://www.jdirving.com/en/newsroom/j.d.-irving-limited-responds-to-unprofessional-cbc-new-brunswick-story/ B3251_(talk) 15:00, 16 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Is this reference [3] reliable? It is an independent news source that repeats information from other sources and is used in this sentence, "In their statement, Irving also called for CBC to "immediately remove the story from their website, publish a full retraction, and apologize for their appalling behavior". Poitras responded back on Twitter with a tweet stating, "We stand by our story." Another source [4] is already used in the sentence and seems more reliable. I could be wrong and both sources can be kept if you think that they're fine.