Talk:Ellen Phillips Samuel Memorial/GA1

GA Review

Passed. — Ghost River 01:52, 7 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 14:25, 26 January 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hello! My name is GhostRiver, and I'll be conducting this GA review. I will assess the article against the good article criteria. Once I complete my review, you will have seven days to implement the suggested edits.

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

History

Ellen Phillips Samuel

Per an early publication from FPAA, Samuel was specifically born March 8, 1849
- Edited the article to specify the exact date of her birth. -JJonahJackalope (talk) 15:59, 24 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
She died in 1913 and bequeathed much of her estate → Upon her death in 1913, she bequeathed much of her estate

Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Tweak the parameters on the inflation template to change "14,800,000" to "14.8 million"
- Changed inflation template to read "14.8 million" instead of "14,800,000". -JJonahJackalope (talk) 15:59, 24 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Initial plans

Women are widows, men are widowers

Fixed -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

If you plan to link "will", do so in the first paragraph, not under "Initial plans"

Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I'd swap the note so that the main prose says "East River Drive", as that was her actual stipulation, and then make the rename the note
- Swapped East River Drive and Kelly Drive. -JJonahJackalope (talk) 15:59, 24 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Bunford was criticized by some in the local art community → Some in the local art community criticized Bunford for active voice

Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

any plans for commissioning more art → any plans to commission more art

Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

"though he remained hopeful"

Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The second paragraph is the only time after her widower is first introduced that he's referred to as "J. Bunford" and not just "Bunford"

Fixed -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

"chosen by ~~art~~ association president"

Removed -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

You should add "who" before "created an overall design for the memorial", but that makes the sentence quite long

Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

East Coast should be capitalized as it refers to a region and not a general concept

Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Semicolons after "the settlement of the east coast" and after "and immigration"

Done

First Sculpture International (1933)

which would run from May → which ran from May

Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Per MOS:OVERLINK, major countries like England, France, and Russia don't need to be linked

Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Second Sculpture International (1940)

of foreign artists → by foreign artists

Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Sentence structure in second para could be clarified - are both the Calder mobiles by the entrance as well, or just the rotating sculpture?
"~~Art~~ critics questioned the classification"

Removed -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

over the value of abstract art → on the value of abstract art

Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Inflation calculator for the values in the last paragraph

Third Sculpture International (1949)

where sculptures were for sale suggest revising to something like "pieces" to reduce repetition of "sculptures"

Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Dedication and later history

A commemorative plaque affixed to the memorial for the memorial reads: Holy repetition, Batman!

Fixed -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The next year, Jacques Lipchitz bronze work, Missing possessive

Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Source refers to the Karlsefni statue as being toppled by vandals, not protestors
- Changed wording from "protestors" to "vandals" to maintain consistency with the source. -JJonahJackalope (talk) 15:59, 24 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Sculptures

North, South, and Central Terrace are capitalized here but not in History
- For consistency, decapitalized all instances of "north", "south", and "central" in the body of the article. -JJonahJackalope (talk) 15:59, 24 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]
"relief" doesn't need to be linked in both Settling of the Seaboard and The Birth of a Nation

Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Analysis

cricized typo

Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

South Terrace is capitalized here but not in the History section

Done -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Notes and references

Good

General comments

No stability concerns, nominator is main editor
Images are appropriate and are properly licensed
CV report looks good, almost all proper nouns and direct quotations

Putting on hold. Please ping me when everything has been addressed. — Ghost River 19:45, 17 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@JJonahJackalope Just to let you know, I've went ahead and already addressed some basic stuff in the article and they're marked above. Good luck on getting the article to GA and lmk if anything else is requested of me! -Dcdiehardfan (talk) 04:13, 21 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

GhostRiver, just wanted to ping you to let you know that I have reviewed your GA review and made some additional edits to address the points you raised. Additionally, I want to thank Dcdiehardfan for their help. Please let me know if you have any further questions, comments, or concerns regarding the article. -JJonahJackalope (talk) 15:59, 24 February 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@GhostRiver, are you able to close this review? -- asilvering (talk) 16:59, 21 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

JJonahJackalope Apologies for the delay. Bipolar disorder is difficult. Passing now. — Ghost River 01:51, 7 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.