Talk:Ezra Weston II/GA1

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Reviewer: SpartaN (talk · contribs) 04:58, 17 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

The article looks good for the most part. I only found a few issues, so I'm being a grammar nazi. Some minor issues I might just fix myself.

"In 1803, Ezra I earned the nickname "King Caesar" partly due to his ambitious character but also due to his victory that year in a local political conflict involving the construction of the first Bluefish River Bridge in Duxbury."

Maybe change to: "In 1803, Ezra I earned the nickname, "King Caesar", partly due to his ambitious character, but also due to his victory in a local political conflict that year involving the construction of the first Blue River Bridge in Duxbury."

"The firm continued to operate a shipyard, mill, ropewalk and wharf in Duxbury, however the fleet increasingly used Boston as their home port, particularly as Weston built larger vessels that could not return to Duxbury after their launch."

to: The firm continued to operate a shipyard, mill, ropewalk, and wharf in Duxbury; however, the fleet increasingly used Boston as their home port, particularly as Weston built larger vessels that were unable to return to Duxbury after their launch.

"He oversaw the Weston shipyard for ten years and then established his own shipyard in East Boston in 1837, eventually building famous clipperships including the Surprise."

to: He oversaw the Weston shipyard for ten years until, in 1837, he established his own shipyard in East Boston. Hall went on to build famous clipperships, including the Surprise.

"In 1834, Weston established a large shipyard on the Bluefish River in Duxbury known as the Ten Acre Yard. It had the capacity for the simultaneous construction of two vessels. The largest vessels of the Weston fleet were built there."

to: In 1834, Weston established a large shipyard on the Bluefish River in Duxbury known as the Ten Acre Yard. The largest vessels of the Weston fleet were built there, and it had the capacity for the simultaneous construction of two vessels.

"Weston vessels were known for their superior quality and durability and several earned notoriety while owned by Weston or later under the ownership of other merchants."

to: Weston vessels were known for their superior quality and durability. Several earned notoriety while owned by either Weston, or later, under the ownership of other merchants.

"The brig Messenger, launched in 1834, was also sold to a whaling merchant and in 1862 became part of the infamous Stone Fleet sunk in Charleston Harbor by the United States Navy in hopes of obstructing the Confederate port during the Civil War."

to: The brig Messenger, launched in 1834, was also sold to a whaling merchant and, in 1862, became part of the infamous Stone Fleet sunk in Charleston Harbor by the United States Navy in hopes of obstructing the Confederate port during the Civil War.

The article looks really good. After these changes I'll pass the article. SpartaN (talk) 04:58, 17 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks very much for the feedback. I've made these corrections. I appreciate the copy editing! Best, Historical Perspective 2 (talk) 16:29, 17 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]