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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 20:14, 20 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'll get to this shortly, but you'll need family information, if any.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:14, 20 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

he obviously had no biographers. I've looked in all the usual places, but he was a bit of a &^%$#@), so maybe no-one bothered... Peacemaker67 (send... over) 12:26, 22 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • If nothing is known about is family life say so.
  • What did he do during WW1? You'll probably need to hunt down some books on the Luftstreitkräfte and its pilots. Ask User:MisterBee1966 and on the WP:Aviation talk pages for assistance.
  • add |adj=on code to {{convert|30|lb|kg}} to get the hyphen added as it needs to be. Remember this for future compound adjectives like 15-inch shell, etc.
    • Done.
  • Delete the "s" in metal ores production and subsequent usages
    • Done.
  • This is awkward Despite the theoretical supreme authority of the Military Commander in Serbia within the occupied territory, there were often competing interests at work because of the presence in Belgrade of direct representatives of senior Nazi officials such as Himmler and Göring. mainly from the "because of" See if you can rephrase to eliminate that.
    • Done, let me know what you think?
  • agreement was reached "an" agreement was reached
    • Done.
  • add a comma after and to set off the independent clause: concentration camp and although Göring arranged his release,
    • Done, I think...
  • Yugoslav or Yugoslavian? The latter sounds awkward to me, although I understand that it's popular in certain circles. Same issue arises with Slovak vs Slovakian, etc. Maybe it's just me.
    • Done. I generally prefer Yugoslav in this context too.
  • Put all title in the bibliography in title case.
    • I have checked and changed a couple to ensure they are all capitalised per the book titles on Worldcat.
  • no DABs or problems with external links
  • Pictures appropriately licensed.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 16:25, 22 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]