Talk:Frigid bumblebee

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment

This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Peer reviewers: Allykunze.

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Review

Overall great article! You may want to consider adding some subsections to the conservation section. This will provide the article with consistency in terms of organization. The current text under the conservation section also is somewhat overwhelming (big block). You may also want to consider citing the “overview section”. There are currently no citations in the overview section. --Jkottapalli (talk) 03:09, 5 December 2015 (UTC)

Review

I think this article had a very good section on Ecology. I think hyperlinks will be much needed for this article since many sections have words and terms that are confusing. This will allow you to remove the many parentheses in the article to make it flow better. This is especially true in the description section of the article. In Distribution and Habitat, you say that there have been erroneous findings and then say again that the records were found in error. It seems kind of redundant, so I recommend removing that section unless it serves another purpose. Also, I would expand on haplodiploidy since that is a big part of bees. However, I thought this was a very informative article. Tefrancis (talk) 01:42, 2 October 2015 (UTC)

College project

This article was expanded due to a college assignment. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Floyd Burney (talk • contribs) 23:14, 26 September 2015 (UTC)

Comments/Editions

I made a few minor changes throughout the article to make the writing flow better. Overall, I think that this page is off to a great start! However, I would comment that the page probably should have more citations in each section, even if it is cited from the same source. Further, I think that the article would benefit from expanding some of the sections and adding in more hyperlinks. I found the section on T1-T5 confusing, as well, but was unsure of how to reword it. Allykunze (talk) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Allykunze (talk • contribs) 01:49, 2 October 2015 (UTC)

Suggestions

This is a very good article, and I thought you did a particularly good job of explaining the key differences between B. frigidus and other bees. In terms of edits, I changed your heading "ecology" to "behavior" because that seemed more fitting, and created a new heading "interactions with other species" that includes diet, parasites, and mutualism. I corrected typos and made slight sentence structure changes. Lastly, I added a bunch of links to other Wikipedia pages, either for the species of plants that you mentioned throughout the article or for concepts that I thought were crucial to understanding your information, like haplodiploidy and mutualism. The biggest thing that you need to do moving forward is add a lot more in-text citations. Wikipedia wants there to be as many citations as possible, after each individual fact if possible. This is a great start to your article and I think it is going to turn out excellent! Melliott132 (talk) 03:50, 2 October 2015 (UTC)

Potential Edits

I was particularly impressed with your article, which was grammatically correct and contained a good balance of information, while simultaneously being aesthetically pleasing. Good job! I corrected a few grammatical errors and punctuation, and would recommend adding more information to the introduction section so that readers have a good idea of the article contains. I would also recommend adding more citations throughout the article subsections as they seemed to be a bit sparse in the “Description” and “Distribution and Habitat” sections. Many sentence containing citations from more than one source contained both citations at the end of the sentence, for example: “After mating, the males will die and the new queens will obtain nectar for a short time before finding a new hibernaculum for the winter.[4][6]” However, this is slightly confusing for the reader if they are trying to understand where each fact originated. This article is very very close to achieving “Good Article” Status! Mmc7777 (talk) 02:40, 4 December 2015 (UTC)

Final Comments

I was impressed with the volume and specificity of information offered in your article. I was also impressed with the amount of pictures and their subjects. I would suggest taking a final look at your second paragraph in your introduction and trying to make the information flow a bit better. The paragraph seems to focus mainly on their adaptation to the cold with bits on information attached on either side, while I think that section should be more broad. I would recommend either adding to or removing the statement "This bee should not be confused with Bombus mixtus and Bombus balteatus". Why would the reader get them confused? Or is this just supposed to be listing other species in this genus? I'm also confused by the sentence "Bombus frigidus have a yellow thorax and T1-T2." Does T1 and T2 refer to areas on the abdomen? In that case, should it say that T1-T2 is yellow? I removed the parenthesis from the distinguishing coloring between males and females. I moved the link for "hybernaculum" to its first use. I added a 0 to your mass measurements below 1. This may seem picky, but it makes it easier to read. Overall, great article!Flynnt2013 (talk) 05:51, 6 December 2015 (UTC)