Talk:Gareth Bale/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 07:18, 6 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I am taking up this review. Will post my comments in 24 hours. Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 07:18, 6 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Please exclude citations from the lead. All facts in the lead must also be mentioned in the main text and the citations should be present just there.
Free kick should be linked at first mention

Done — Jkudlick • t • c • s 16:02, 7 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Please use convert templates consistently throughout the article.
What is Spurs? Link?

Done "Spurs" is a nickname for Tottenham Hotspur F.C.. I have changed it to "Tottenham." — Jkudlick • t • c • s 16:02, 7 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Early life and career

Bale was born in Cardiff, Wales Give the full name when you begin with the main text
to parents Frank, a school caretaker, and Debbie, an operations manager I think you should refer to the parents by their full names
He was a keen athlete and played football alongside future Wales rugby captain Sam Warburton,[23] rugby, hockey and excelled at athletics Can be rewritten as "He was a keen athlete; he played football,-alongside future Wales rugby captain Sam Warburton-rugby, hockey and excelled at athletics"
Are refs. 25 and 26 the source for only the quote? The sources for the line or two preceding it?

Southampton

debut in the Saints' 2–0 victory Link Saints
Link free kick, it's the first mention in the main text
and at home to Norwich City. Source?
Derby County is a duplink
scoring 5 goals Say "five" as per the MoS

2007–09

Link friendly, dead-leg
Duplinks: Manchester United
coolly slotted past goalkeeper "Coolly" may sound like original research or unencyclopedic
Has Arsenal been linked anywhere? It should be linked at the first mention in the main text
making it three goals in four starts for the then 18-year-old. Source?
ligament damage Links?
exploratory surgery on 11 December 2007 We can have a link here. We need not say 2007 in this line
Sporting Director of?

2009-11

for over 2 months "2" in words
Duplink: Fulham

2010-11

On 21 August Please mention the year when you start a section
head-high volley may be linked
Duplinks: Champions League, White Hart Lane.
You need not repeat the year 2010 throughout the section. Give it simply at the start of the section
On 17 April 2011 2011 need not be repeated in this line.

2011–12

Bale scored his first goal of the season "season" could be linked to 2011–12 Tottenham Hotspur F.C. season
On 3 December 2011 ; On 27 June 2012 Unless you mention the year at the start of a para as a rule, we do not need years in these lines.
Duplinks: Tottenham, Fulham, Norwich City, Premier League Player of the Month

2012–13

For the 2012–13 season "season" could be linked to 2012–13 Tottenham Hotspur F.C. season
Bale scored his first goal of the season against Reading in a 3–1 away victory Date? With year as well.
On 29 September We need the year here unless you mention it before as I asked to in the previous point
Link FA Cup, Clint Dempsey
Duplinks: Coventry City, Norwich City, West Bromwich Albion, North London derby, Premier League Player of the Month, BBC, Goal of the Month, White Hart Lane, Southampton, Sunderland
On 30 January, Bale scored a superb solo effort in the 1–1 draw with Norwich City "superb" may sound a bit like overstatement
this took Spurs into third place, and strengthened their Champions League ambitions. Could be made into a separate line
against West Ham on 25 February I guess it is 2013 by now. Mention it here.
On 3 March 2013, Bale scored against Arsenal The year should be mentioned in the line I pointed out in the previous point. Arsenal is to be linked in an earlier section
In the next para, 2013 is repeated
the same season, the other being Cristiano Ronaldo, who won them in 2007 I think a dash should separate the part about Ronaldo from the rest of the line

Real Madrid

signing a six-year deal for an undisclosed fee. Source?
Duplinks: Cristiano Ronaldo, world record transfer fee

2013–14

Duplinks:Champions League, round-of-16, Atlético Madrid
of Real's first sixteen games Could be written as 16, as is generally recommended for numbers above 10. Same for played the final twenty-six minutes

2014–15

Duplinks:Cristiano Ronaldo, Real Sociedad, Carlo Ancelotti, Málaga

2015–16

Duplink: Rayo Vallecano

International career

Duplinks: Ryan Giggs, David Vaughan, Cardiff City Stadium, Football Association of Wales, Liverpool

Style of play

I hope there is no overstatement or original research here
Duplinks: Harry Redknapp, Olympique Lyonnais, Liverpool, the Champions League, Cristiano Ronaldo, Norwich City

Career statistics

The "International" table could be updated

Outside football

Source for was born at the University Hospital of Wales, Cardiff on 21 October 2012. ?
Duplinks: Lionel Messi, Cristiano Ronaldo

Sources:

Are Refs. 4, 39, 46, 90, 127 reliable? I could not check all the sources, please see that unreliable sources like blogs do not find a place here.
In ref. 133 say BBC not bbc.com

Done — Jkudlick • t • c • s 15:51, 7 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Ref. 141 is a dead link

The correct link should be to The #10 million man. 78.147.171.217 (talk) 14:46, 7 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you! I have repaired it. Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 16:00, 7 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Cristianho19: You are requested to respond to the comments here. I believed you were inactive since October 2015 but since you appear to be active again, I will not fail the review. The review has already remained open for a week now and other editors have assisted; if there is no response from your side by 21st this month (that would be two weeks since the review started) I would have to sadly fail the nomination. Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 10:34, 15 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

There has been no response from the nominator's side till the 21st. I shall have to fail this article. However, I hope necessary changes are soon made in the article and it is soon renominated. Sainsf <^>_{Feel at home} 08:22, 22 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

After re-nominating, I have followed up on most of the items found on this list, especially the hard bit where there were a lot of references found in the lead section. There may still be some points to be talked about, it can take up to seven days to post a new review. Iggy (Swan) 21:41, 18 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]