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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 03:39, 16 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]


Design and description
  • "This change could only be applied to the three least-advanced ships, including Effingham, although she did not receive the full upgrade." - This copied and pasted from the Effingham article? Looks like you forgot to switch out the name of the ship.
    • Damn computer!
  • I know some ships had a different crew strength when serving as a flagship. Is this applicable here?
    • Maybe, but nothing in the sources.
Construction and career
  • "has been the only ship of her name to serve in the Royal Navy" - Might be worth a footnote that HMS Parker (1916) was apparently known as Frobisher for a decent chunk of its construction
    • I thought about it, but decided against doing so since Parker was renamed before completion and so didn't actually serve in the RN under that name.
  • "In 1929–1930 the ship served with the Atlantic Fleet,[10] By June 1930 her - Period, not a comma
  • "By June 1930 her aft superfiring gun had been removed to provide space for a floatplane" - Okay, so I'm half-asleep as a review this, so maybe this is just a comprehension issue, but " four of which were in superfiring pairs fore and aft of the superstructure," sound to me like there were two aft superfiring guns, so its unclear which was removed
    • Superfiring pairs means one gun superfiring above the other, not two guns superfiring over another
References
  • The Dreadnought Project is an iffy source. It looks like one of the higher-quality wikis, but it's still a wiki.
  • Campbell isn't used
  • Need a location for Heathcote
Other
  • It's in a category for being built in Portsmouth, but the prose says it was built in Devonsport
Unrelated to this article, but worth a thought
  • The dab page HMS Frobisher could conceivably be reduced to dual hatnotes per WP:TWODABS, unless there's a third Frobisher not listed there.

That's it for this one. Hog Farm Bacon 04:08, 16 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for looking this one over.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:39, 20 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]