Talk:HMS Sea Nymph (P223)

GA Review

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 00:56, 10 January 2020 (UTC)

I will take a gander at this one. Comments to follow in due course. Zawed (talk) 00:56, 10 January 2020 (UTC)

• Lead: suggest linking Pacific (you've linked North Sea), u-boat, battleships, fjord
  • Done.
• Lead: "After losing tow with X8, it was scuttled..." : suggest rephrasing to make it clear X8 was being scuttled.
  • Done.
• Lead: "...British special operations agents..." : special operations suggests SOE? If so, suggest linking to SOE. If the source doesn't support SOE, then maybe delete "special operations"
  • Source doesn't explicitly say that they were SOE, removed.
• Lead: suggest adjusting the link on Tirpitz so only the ship's name is linked, not German battleship (as battleship previously used in lead but not linked). Ditto the Operation Source section.
  • Done.
• Design and description: "two 950-brake-horsepower (708 kW) diesel engines" : in the infobox, the kW measurement is given as 1,400, rather than 1,416.
  • Took me an eternity to figure this out, but done
• Design and description: "and 120 nmi" : suggest reciting nmi in full as you haven't abbreviated it in the text. The use of abbreviation is inconsistent with the other measurements you have used. For example, knots in written out in full every time.
  • Done.
• Construction and career: "P 73" : this lacks antecedence. Suggest clarifying earlier in the paragraph that she was known as P 73
  • Done.
• Northern patrols: the first two paragraphs are quite short, suggest combining them. I notice Norway is linked but France - suggest consistency in how you treat countries for linking purposes. For example, no countries, including Norway, are linked in lead.
  • Done.
• Arctic patrols: "...ordered to conduct a special operation, transporting British..." suggest rephrasing to "...ordered to transport British..."
  • Done.
• Later career: link Norwegian sea and u-boats (I don't think you've used the term yet apart from the lead.
  • Done.
• References: for Akermann, use the orig-year=2009 in the cite book template, then you don't need to have that text in the edition part of the template. Grove is missing location information. Colledge is not in alphabetical order but isn't cited anyway.
  • Done.
    • I think you may have misunderstood me here, I moved Colledge to a further reading section since it wasn't cited. Zawed (talk) 09:49, 12 January 2020 (UTC)
• The tags for the Tirpitz image are little strange but it is used in an FA article so is probably OK. The others are fine.
• Earwig tool finds some similarity with uboat.net but looking at the actual text, I think it should be OK.

That's it for me. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 09:03, 10 January 2020 (UTC)

• • Thanks for this through review. L293D (☎ • ✎) 19:28, 10 January 2020 (UTC)
    • I made one further change as noted above but am now passing as GA now as I consider that this article meets the necessary criteria. Zawed (talk) 09:49, 12 January 2020 (UTC)