Talk:Iran at the 2014 Winter Paralympics/GA1

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Reviewer: Usernameunique (talk · contribs) 23:47, 5 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

The lead is concise but somewhat short; I'd consider expanding it slightly. Places you could consider adding are Kalhor's disability and his times.

Infobox

Probably not relevant, but what does "I.R." stand for?
- Islamic Republic. The formal post revolution name of the country is The Islamic Republic of Iran. More when I get home. Courcelles (talk) 00:04, 6 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Background

Is "Iran" singular (Iran has) or plural (Iran have)? Regardless, the second sentence ("The nation sent...") should take a singular form.
- I'm not seeing the problem on this point. Courcelles (talk) 01:02, 6 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  - Right now the second sentence states "The nation... have sent," which is grammatically incorrect. It should be "The nation... has sent."
"Sadegh Kalhor was the only athlete sent to Sochi by Iran, as he had been for the three immediately preceding Winter Paralympics." — Consider adding that even in the first Iranian Paralympics, there was only one other person.
- Done. Courcelles (talk) 01:02, 6 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
This section should have some information about the 2014 Paralympics generally.
- Some added, but I'm really not sure what you're looking for. Courcelles (talk) 01:02, 6 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Alpine skiing

"his fifth consecutive Games" — How old was he at his first games?
- COunting back, about 19, but I don't have an RS for it. Courcelles (talk) 00:54, 6 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
LW2 links to Lethal Weapon 2
- Done. Courcelles (talk) 00:54, 6 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
What defines the LW2 classification, specifically?
- Added. Courcelles (talk) 00:54, 6 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
How is the LW2 division scored? The inference is that you add the times from two runs together, and the lowest wins; this is not stated explicitly, however.
- Stated. Courcelles (talk) 01:02, 6 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
"The gold medal was won by Alexey Bugaev of Russia" — What about silver and bronze?
- Added. Courcelles (talk) 01:02, 6 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Photographs

I added a caption and alt text to the flag of Iran. How about a photograph of Sadegh Kalhor? If you can't find anything with an appropriate license, I think you could reasonably fair use an image.
- No way I'd ever upload a non-free image for this article, I'd speedily delete it myself as a non-free image of a living person. Courcelles (talk) 00:54, 6 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good overall, Courcelles. I think it should be expanded slightly in a number of places, and a photograph would be nice, but it's not far off. --Usernameunique (talk) 23:47, 5 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I think I'm done? Courcelles (talk) 01:02, 6 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- Courcelles, one minor point above in response to your query. As an aside, I'd recommend breifly copyediting after your GAC edits; there have been a number of random typos ("silve rwas"; "france"; "[3].[4]" and so on) that could have been picked up on easily. --Usernameunique (talk) 06:00, 6 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  - Fixed, and, lesson learned, once the sleeping pills are taken, stop trying to work! Courcelles (talk) 15:00, 6 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]
    - Thanks, Courcelles. Passing now. --Usernameunique (talk) 01:45, 10 August 2018 (UTC)[reply]