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Reviewer: Coemgenus (talk · contribs) 19:53, 6 February 2012 (UTC) No deadlinks or disambigs. I'll start the substantive review in a few hours. --Coemgenus (talk) 19:53, 6 February 2012 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
- The only things I'd change:
- (1) In the lede, I think "before" is better than "prior to". It's more like people actually speak without being informal.
- Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 20:47, 7 February 2012 (UTC)
- (2) In "Sophomore year": is it "the USA Today" or just "USA Today"? I know most newspapers use the definite article, but it seems like I've heard USA Today without it.
- I could go either way. removed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 20:52, 7 February 2012 (UTC)
- (3) In "Junior year": I'd spell out state names, not use postal abbreviations, but I don't think it contravenes the MoS either way.
- Spelled out.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 21:09, 7 February 2012 (UTC)
- (4) The article isn't consistent in how dates are written -- some are day-month-year, others month-day-year
- I don't see any instances of this inconsistency in the notes.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 21:22, 7 February 2012 (UTC)
- It turns out there was only one instance, caused by a template. I fixed it. --Coemgenus (talk) 21:25, 7 February 2012 (UTC)
- I don't see any instances of this inconsistency in the notes.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 21:22, 7 February 2012 (UTC)
- a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- Citations are plentiful.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- No POV in evidence.
- In the last section "basketball training guru" seems an overly promotional description of Tim Grover. --He to Hecuba (talk) 20:39, 7 February 2012 (UTC)
- No POV in evidence.
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- Seems stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- No images, likely none available that aren't copyrighted.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- OK, looks good to me. Passed. --Coemgenus (talk) 21:25, 7 February 2012 (UTC)
- Pass/Fail: