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GA Review

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Reviewer: DanCherek (talk · contribs) 22:15, 29 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your work on this article! I will be reviewing this against the GA criteria and will post my comments below. DanCherek (talk) 22:15, 29 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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Career

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  • His father's name is Patrick, not Peter, per BBC source
  • Seems weird to give match results for all except for Darryl Hill, maybe include that 5–1?
  • Is there a source for "only ever occurrence of a whitewash in the final"?
  • "losing to Joe Perry 6–3, and Ken Doherty 4–0 respectively": "respectively" is not needed here as there is no ambiguity
  • he "couldn't believe how badly [he] had played" → he couldn't "believe how badly [he] played" per exact quote from source
  • "the second event, to Jamie Cope" — should specify the scores here like you do with the other two
  • Quote box: I don't think you need to put the exact same quote in the reference itself, seems redundant
  • Quote box should be moved down one paragraph so that it is placed next to the text about Ronnie O'Sullivan
  • I don't see the "giant killer" detail in either of the cited sources
  • "returned to being an amateur player" recommend adding "in June 2021" per lead

Personal life

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  • Ref 49 goes to the same link as ref 4
  • Can you wikilink to the appropriate "Preston"? There appears to be a gazillion of them in England
  • ban from driving: I would specify that it was a 1-year ban and that it happened in 2015
  • "money and valuables being stolen": from the source, it looks like just money was stolen, no mention of valuables

Additional comments

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This is close! Putting this nomination on hold so that edits and/or responses can be made. If you have time, I have a peer review open here for what I'm hoping will be my first FAC, and any comments would be appreciated! DanCherek (talk) 00:27, 30 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Lee Vilenski: I have two remaining questions, though they are minor and will not hold up the promotion of this article so I will pass it in the meantime. Congratulations! The first question is the "Career finals" thing which I responded to above. The second is that Preston is a disambiguation page. I was going to fix it myself but was not sure whether to link to Preston, Lancashire or City of Preston, Lancashire (or another one). DanCherek (talk) 12:12, 30 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

GA progress

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
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