Talk:James Inglis Hamilton/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jim Sweeney (talk · contribs) 12:48, 30 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Comments

His adopted son took over Murdostoun before dying a hero's death at the Battle of Waterloo. Hero's death is a bit POV, suggest change to killed during the Battle of Waterloo
- Changed. Michael Jester (talk) 14:45, 30 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Kirk can be linked for those unfamiliar with the Scottish use of the word
- Linked. Michael Jester (talk) 14:45, 30 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
In the lead it claims He was the only Colonel of the 113th Regiment of Foot (Royal Highlanders) but this is not in the main article text so its also not referenced
- Referenced. Michael Jester (talk) 18:21, 30 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Its a bit confusing On 17 October 1761, Hamilton became colonel of the 113th Regiment of Foot then later He became a lieutenant-colonel on 25 May 1772 - why did he drop down in rank and a Lieutenant-Colonel of what?
According to this (currently ref 17), he was a major at the time he became colonel of this regiment. I suppose he was "colonel" in the sense described in the first paragraph of Colonel#History and origins. Note that, a few paragraphs down in the same section, it says that colonel became a professional military rank "by the late 19th century". --Stfg (talk) 14:17, 30 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- What should I do here? I'm a bit confused. Michael Jester (talk) 22:22, 30 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  - A possible rephrasing might be something like On 17 October 1761, while holding the rank of major,[ref 18] Hamilton became major commandant ("colonel") of the 113th Regiment of Foot.[ref 17] And maybe link the scare-quoted "colonel" to Colonel#History and origins. --Stfg (talk) 20:02, 31 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
The Military offices box at the bottom is unreferenced.
- Okay, I referenced it. Michael Jester (talk) 22:22, 30 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
In the references section several well known locations are linked London, New York etc
- I believe I have done this. Michael Jester (talk) 17:43, 30 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
There is also London England if adding a country it should be United Kingdom, same with Edinburgh
- Fixed it. Michael Jester (talk) 17:43, 30 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
All books need the country of publication if using it for one.
- Added country. Michael Jester (talk) 17:43, 30 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Review finished Jim Sweeney (talk) 17:26, 30 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you Jim for taking time to review this article. I am kind of busy today, so I don't know how much I will be able to get done.
—Michael Jester (talk) 14:45, 30 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, I believe I have addressed all (except for the one I commented on) your comments.
—Michael Jester (talk) 22:22, 30 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Well done passed GA Jim Sweeney (talk) 09:48, 31 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]