Talk:Joel Bach/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Vacant0 (talk · contribs) 14:42, 23 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Hi! I will review this article due to the ongoing GAN backlog. --Vacant0 (talk) 14:42, 23 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Comments

General

Infobox: Birth date is unsourced.
- Unused parameters can be deleted.
- Occupation: "Journalist, film and television producer" → "{{hlist|Journalist|film and television producer}}"
- Years active: 1991-present → 1991–present
- Remove break tags and implement the {{ubl}} template; eg. {{ubl|''[[60 Minutes]]''|''[[Years of Living Dangerously]]''}} (also goes for notable_works)
- Unlink "Years of Living Dangerously" at the Notable works parameter since one wl is already present above
- Footnotes are not needed since the information seems to be sourced below in the text.
- Optional: add {{use mdy dates|date=June 2022}} below the SD template.
Early life and education:
- "He created the short film, Brown Is Green, intended to educate..." → "He created a short film named Brown Is Green, which was intended to educate..."
- Gelber → David Gelber; this is the first time he gets mentioned in the text excluding the lede, it should be changed to his full name.
Journalism career:
- Unlink short films, climate change.
- Wikilink feature film.
- Quote: "he’d" and "‘Absolutely.’" → "he'd" and "'Absolutely'"
  - "He seemed to perk up when this issue came across his lap We" → add a dot between lap and We, as seen in the source.
- There seems to be a sudden stop after the second season, which seemed to have aired 6 years ago, is there more info about Bach's present career, from 2016 to now on?
  - His project seems to be still active up to this day.
- It should be also mentioned in the text that it had ended in 2016.
Filmography: "2004-2011" → 2004–2011; "2014-2016" → 2014–2016
Lede: Refs are not needed since the content is already cited below in the text, per MOS:LEADCITE.
- Another paragraph will be needed since it has more than 30,000 characters, per MOS:LEADLENGTH.

Images

None, although it would be great to include at least one.

Sources

Filmography: X Marks the Spot is unsourced.
Early life and education: Three sources are not needed to back up a simple claim such as that he spent his early life in Colorado, one is enough.
Archive the rest of the sources.
Sources present are reliable.
Copyvio unlikely.
Ref verification: (Ref 1, Ref 4, Ref 8, Ref 10, Ref 12, Ref 20, Ref 23, Ref 27, Ref 32, Ref 35, Ref 37, Ref 40, Ref 43, Ref 48) and they verify the content that's on the page.

@Princessa Unicorn: Considering these issues, including the fact that there is no post-2016 information about him in the text, I'll put this on hold for at least a week. If these issues remain, it'll have to get renominated. --Vacant0 (talk) 16:08, 23 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

It seems like user "Joelbach" (might be COI) had edited the page alongside two IP editors since then, while the nominator hadn't made any edits since April. The page will have to quickfail because it contains errors, per WP:GAFAIL(1). Vacant0 (talk) 12:57, 1 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.