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Valid as of 2011-06-11. Viriditas (talk) 05:29, 12 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Issues

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Addressing peer review

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This peer review discussion has been closed.
Hi. I'm trying to get this article ready for GA, but I'm only about halfway there. I could definitely use some constructive criticism for guidance. Thanks. Viriditas (talk) 20:25, 2 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I have a couple of suggestions, but it's not at all exhaustive:

  • File:John Neulinger c. 1989.png probably doesn't have an adequate fair use rationale. That there is no free image of Neulinger is not a fair use rationale.
  • "was a noted German-American psychologist" - remove noted, if he wasn't notable, then he would not have an article.
  • Why was he taken to a concentration camp?
  • "1964-1965" - ndash?
  • "In the late 1960s, Neulinger and Miranda Breit were one of the first leisure researchers to use attitudinal data instead of participation data to define activity clusters." this should be expanded, and does contain a bit of unwiki-linked jargon. If possible to replace the jargon then do it.
  • Is it normal to publish such a large list of publications? May be good to add a paragraph introducing the bibliography. Where was the list obtained from?
    • Yes it is normal, but there are many different formats available for editors. I believe my chosen format must have confused you, so I will look into standardizing it. Also, I don't think this list is very large. Since I wrote the article some time ago, I'm not sure where the "list" was obtained from, but I reviewed all of the publications myself, so one could argue I created it. I'm not sure why you asked that question. Viriditas (talk) 04:07, 21 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Not sure what the MoS says, but with dates in the references, would it be better to state the month and day explicitly rather than say "2009-03-05" have March 05, 2009 or June 03, 2009 (depending on what style dates you use).
  • Having redlinked see also material seems pointless to me.
  • " Nevertheless, Neulinger's theory exerted considerable influence on the social theory of leisure, and perceived freedom is still a popular concept in leisure studies.[9]" - are there examples of how this theory exerted influence?
  • Other than that, the article could do with a little expansion in most areas.

Hope these points help - Shudde talk 07:51, 23 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

They do, very much. I can see I have my work cut out for me! Viriditas (talk) 04:09, 21 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
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