Talk:Leopard/GA1

GA Review

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I'm afraid that there has to be some serious work done to get this article to match the Good article standard. I will have a second look at the article if my main concerns are met.

Things that must be improved:

The refs 4, 6 and 7 are dead.
The refs (23 see below), (24 see below), 31, 32, (38 see below) and 46 need information about the publisher (and the author if possible).
The ADW (ref 23 and 38) is not a reliable source, since "The Animal Diversity Web is an educational resource written largely by and for college students." It has to be replaced.
Seaworld.org (ref 24) is certainly not a reliable source for infos about leopards, at least it is a self-published source and we do not know about the knowledge of the author.
I am not convinced that ref 42, 46 and 51 are reliable sources. Why do you think that they are?
"the number growing from the time of Linnaeus in the 18th century to that of Reginald Pocock in the early 20th." This needs a clarification.
"Their list as follows:" This list contains 10 subspecies, not 9.
"given a massive skull that well utilizes powerful jaw muscles." utilizes: very strange wording.
The chapter on Variant coloration is much too long, especially compared to the quite short chapter about general physical characteristics. I propose to merge some aspects of the paragraph "Most other colour morphs of leopards are known only [...]" (lacks sources!) with the previous paragraph "A pseudo-melanistic leopard has a normal background color, [...]" and to remove all (also unsourced!) paragraphs starting with "In a paper about panthers and ounces of Asia, [...]".
"It is a powerful swimmer, although, not as strong as some other big cats," A swimmer can be fast and/or enduring, but not strong.
In References: "Leopards and spots on ears and tail [1]" What?
The ref 27 contains strange information and needs to be formatted properly.
"and are capable of carrying animals up to three times their own weight this way." needs a source.
"Eventually, a fight for reproductive rights may take place." This does not flow with the previous and the next sentence and has to be explained.
"but infant mortality is high and usually no more than 1–2 cubs survive beyond their infancy." needs a source.
", while the sexual difference in range size seemed to be in positive proportion to overall increase.[35]" What? I don't understand the meaning of this.
"Leopards have adapted to live alongside these other predators by hunting at different times of the day, and by avoiding areas frequented by them." needs a source.
"though numerous products worldwide have used the name." This needs clarification. What's the meaning of used the name?
"Leopard domestication has also been recorded [...]" That's not domestication!!!
The whole Tourism chapter needs sources.
"most leopards avoid humans." This needs a source, badly.
"In extreme cases, both in India: a leopard dubbed [...]" Wrong grammar.

Things that should be improved:

"The species' success in the wild" Probably not the best wording regarding its recent decline of population numbers.
"Felis pardus was one of the many species described in Linnaeus's 18th-century work, Systema Naturae.[5]" Why is this useful to know? It should most likely be removed.
"Older taxonomic divisions" According to whom?
The chapter about general physical characteristcs is very short, at least some information on sensory perception and maybe locomotion should be added.
"Leopards have been reported to reach 21 years of age in captivity.[18]" This belongs in the "life cycle" chapter.
"The leopard is primarily a nocturnal creature, and many of its operations are done by night." The second part of the sentence is totally redundant to the well-known word nocturnal.

Fixed Seduisant (talk) 20:14, 23 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"The pregnant females find a cave, crevice among boulders, hollow tree, or thicket to give birth and make a den." find a cave: strange wording.
"Leopards and humans have many relations," have many relations: strange wording.

Content placed elsewhere and offending sentence removed. Seduisant (talk) 23:53, 26 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Things that could be improved:

It's always good to have two or three sentences out of the chapters reproduction/life cycle/social structure in the lead.
Are all of those 10 external links useful for a further understanding of the article?
"The leopard is also very agile, and can run over sixty kilometers an hour, leap over six metres and jump up to three metres vertically.[24]" Provide imperial units in parentheses.
"most leopards avoid humans." Why do they avoid humans?
There should be more information about leopards in mythology and literature.

--Novil Ariandis (talk) 16:05, 4 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]