Talk:Markus Näslund/GA1

GA Review

Lead

• Remove his place of birth from the start per WP:DATE.

• Done – Nurmsook! ^talk... 01:00, 30 July 2008 (UTC)

• "Näslund is a Lester B. Pearson Award winner (2003) and former Hart Memorial Trophy nominee (2003)." I'd remove the brackets and say "Naslund won both the Lester B. Pearson Award and was a Hart Memorial Trophy nominee in 2003." or something similar.

• Done.-- Skyezx _{// msg} 08:27, 29 July 2008 (UTC)

• "Internationally, Näslund has represented Sweden on many occasions, winning two bronze medals (1999 and 2002) and a silver (1993) at the World Championships, as well as two silvers as a junior (1992 and 1993 World Junior Championships)." Again I would remove the brackets and reword.

• Done.-- Skyezx _{// msg} 08:27, 29 July 2008 (UTC)

Early career

• "Prior to joining the NHL," I don't think you need this. I would reword the rest of the sentence to state he started his career in Sweden.

• Done.-- Skyezx _{// msg} 02:52, 30 July 2008 (UTC)

West Coast Express

• "However, his 41 goal, 75 point campaign" and "breaking his personal record with a 90 point season which included 40 goals." I think it should be 41-goal, 75-point and 90-point, but 40 goals is correct.

Done. Orlandkurtenbach (talk) 08:13, 29 July 2008 (UTC)

• How did he break his leg?

Against the Sabres, chasing loose puck. Added reference. Orlandkurtenbach (talk) 08:13, 29 July 2008 (UTC)

• "The high-scoring line was dubbed the West Coast Express, named after Vancouver's commuter rail service of the same name." I think the wikilink is in the wrong place, and should be at either "Vancouver's commuter rail service" or "same name" or even "Vancouver's commuter rail service of the same name." It's current position suggest West Coast Express is an article about the forward line.

Done. Orlandkurtenbach (talk) 08:13, 29 July 2008 (UTC)

• "but would appear in only 13 games due to his late decision to join the team." Who does this refer to?

Clarified. Orlandkurtenbach (talk) 08:13, 29 July 2008 (UTC)

Post lock-out

• "scoring a goal in a losing effort." Why not just "in a loss" or "in a defeat"?

"in a 3-2 shootout loss." Orlandkurtenbach (talk) 08:13, 29 July 2008 (UTC)

• Did anything publicly arise out of his disagreement with Vigneault's defensive coaching style?

He did say that he would not return to Vancouver if they continued to play defense-first. I just can't find a reference. Orlandkurtenbach (talk) 08:13, 29 July 2008 (UTC)

International

• "Näslund has represented Sweden extensively in international hockey competitions," What do you mean by extensively? Is is necessary?

• Done-- Skyezx _{// msg} 08:27, 29 July 2008 (UTC)

• Some of this info is repeated from above.

• If you meant the line about the World Juniors in the Career section, I've moved it to International Play.-- Skyezx _{// msg} 08:27, 29 July 2008 (UTC)

• "Näslund chose not to play due to an injury." What was the injury?

• Done.-- Skyezx _{// msg} 08:27, 29 July 2008 (UTC)

Personal life

• "At one point, Näslund hoped to retire as a Canuck." I think this should be in the career section.

• Done -- Skyezx _{// msg} 03:20, 30 July 2008 (UTC)

Awards

• This section could require referencing.

Added ref for WJC All-Star Team. Orlandkurtenbach (talk) 08:22, 29 July 2008 (UTC)

General

• Numbers and their units should be split with non-breakng spaces e.g. 14 goals.

• Done -- Skyezx _{// msg} 03:20, 30 July 2008 (UTC)

• There's a difference between Semifinals (capped and no hyphen) and semi-finals (no caps, and hyphenated). I much prefer the latter but ensure your usage is consistent.

• Done.-- Skyezx _{// msg} 08:27, 29 July 2008 (UTC)

• There seems to be an inconsistency between American English, e.g. favorite, and British English e.g. labour.

• Fixed what I could find. -- Skyezx _{// msg} 02:52, 30 July 2008 (UTC)

• Make sure the seasons in "career statistics" and "records" sections have endashes.

• Done -- Skyezx _{// msg} 03:20, 30 July 2008 (UTC)

Quite a bit to do, but nothing substantial, so I'll put it on hold. Peanut4 (talk) 23:23, 28 July 2008 (UTC)

Final review

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Very good work. I'd try find that ref and expand the argument with his coach, as well as fully reference the honours section. But otherwise, perhaps think about getting a peer review, and seeing what you could do to work towards FAC. Best of luck with the article. Peanut4 (talk) 22:33, 30 July 2008 (UTC)