Talk:Merv Harvey/GA1

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Reviewer: Sarastro1 (talk) 10:03, 25 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Nice article, just a few very minor points. I'll put it on hold but no problems passing it once everything's done.

Early years I realise much of this is the same as The Harvey family, but a couple of things I missed before.

"The Harveys played another form of cricket in their concreted backyard (using a marble instead of a ball) that sharpened their reflexes,[2] and a miniature bat." A bit muddled here, I think. Either the brackets should go, or the info about the bat should go inside.
"The club had a program whereby they gave a medal to local schools to award to their best cricketer in their ranks, who would then be given access to all of the club’s facilities.": Did every school get a medal, or just the best cricketers from several schools? Also, a bit too much going on in the sentence, a few too many "to"s. Perhaps: "The club awarded medals to the best local school cricketers who were then given access to all of the club's facilities."

First-class beginnings

"first innings points": possibly need to explain that this is for a first innings lead.
"Harvey enlisted at Fitzroy...": (presumably in the RAAF) possibly needs to go at the start of the paragraph.

Post-war resumption and only Test

Was Brown out for the whole season or just for the match Harvey played? If the latter, this paragraph is a bit out of place here. Either way, I think it needs specifying.

whole season for Brown YellowMonkey (bananabucket!) 03:59, 26 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

er, both books YellowMonkey (bananabucket!) 03:59, 26 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

"Merv made 30 and 44, failing to capitalise on his starts to make a big score with a Test vacancy beckoning after incumbent opener Sid Barnes was injured" Slightly run on sentence.
"the part-time medium pace..." Maybe a bit vague for the non-specialist. Medium pace of occasional bowler Yardley?

Final seasons

General

Needs PERSONDATA.
Image is fine, but lacks a source. I think it may be an issue if the article goes any further.

actually, post 1946, so not fine YellowMonkey (bananabucket!) 03:59, 26 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]