Talk:My Worlds: The Collection/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: AJona1992 (talk) 21:17, 3 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Here are some notes and pointers:

Background

"which features acoustic version of songs from Bieber's debut extended play, My World," do you have to say "version of songs"? - a bit confusing.

"Bieber spoke with MTV News and he wanted to record the acoustic songs for the "haters" who say he cannot sing and saying his voice was auto-tuned, and that "stripping it down and having it kind of really mellow and being able to hear my voice" was his purpose" grammar errors. "Bieber, in a interview with MTV News, stated that he wanted to record acoustic songs for his "haters", who said that he cannot sing, while also stating that his voice was auto-tuned." and I don't know where you'd want the quote to be at, so it can fit in with this sentence?

"because the production sometime" - production of what?

"the first disc also contains the Usher-featuring and J-Stax remixes" Usher-featuring? I highly doubt any GA-Class album articles, who has duets in them as well, don't say "artist-featuring" in them. Consider revising.

"an inspirational ballad entitled" seems orish to me, unless you can find a source that states that.

"the song is a gift to his fans" this is stated two times in one section.

""Pray" was released as the album's first and only single on in select international countries on December 3, 201" why is "on" here? Doesn't make any sense.

"It charted moderately, reaching number sixty-three in Austria, fifty-one in Germany, and appeared on the Tip charts in Belgium." source?

Critical reception

Not sure what "churlish" means, can you wiktionary it [1]?

Commercial performance

There are some sentences that you didn't say "number" before their peaks. Per MOS.

"Due to its limited release in European countries, the album was only eligible to chart in those territories" source?

"Six weeks later, on the week labeled January 4, 2011" why not just replace "labeled" with "of"?

"The album debuted at number sixty-two on the Italian Albums Chart, and weeks later it would peak at twenty-seven" a bit odd. "and weeks later"? why not just say it later peaked at number twenty-seven?

"In Poland on the Polish Albums Chart, My Worlds: The Collection debuted at peaked at forty-five, and would spend a total of three weeks on the chart" consider revising.

Overall, I'm going to ✗ Fail the article as it still needs a lot of work. Once you have fixed the issues I had pointed out, please get a peer review, first, then try nominating the article. Best of luck, AJona1992 (talk) 13:13, 6 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]