Talk:One Hundred (Aqua Teen Hunger Force)/GA1
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Reviewer: MuZemike (talk · contribs) 22:56, 9 December 2011 (UTC)
- Prose issues
- In the lead paragraph, you have "One Hundred" listed four times. Is there any way you can list "the episode" or "it" in subsequent mentionings?
- You need to provide some sort of introduction into the "Plot" section, such as "The episode begins with..." or similar.
- Master Shake then flies off to California ... so he deserves it. → The sentence is too long-winded and is causing me to lose track as to what is going on. Please split that sentence up and make it easier to understand.
- A television executive replies that because Aqua Teen Hunger Force is only eleven minutes long, they only have fifty half-hours of material. → So a TV station only has 50 half-hours of material because ATHF is 11 minutes long? That doesn't make sense there.
- Carl makes a brief appearance as well. → Is there a reason why he is mentioned separately from the characters in the previous sentence?
- They all run into a monster, soon after Frylock unmasks the monster, who turns out to be One Hundred in disguise. → the part after the first comma is improper grammar form. That part needs to be rewritten.
- Why is there a one-sentence paragraph at the end of the "Plot" section. Why can it not be in the previous paragraph?
- All the paragraphs in the "Production" and "Release and reception" sections can easily be combined into one full paragraph.
- I would merge the "Cultural references" section into another section, preferably tacked on at the end of the "Production" section.
- The part about the IGN review needs to be rewritten completely. I cannot make if your simply narrating from the review itself or if you're actually trying to summarize what the reviewer felt.
- Coverage issue
This article is sorely lacking in coverage and falls way short of WP:GACR#3a. At least I would expect much more than one review, and as such it's no wonder why this barely squeaked past AfD for notability.
- Verifiability issues
- You need something more reliable than IMDB, I'm afraid.
- Frylock later makes reference to the 2012 phenomenon, when he says Mayans invented the number 100. → The 2012 phenomenon is not mentioned in the source. How do we know, just because Frylock says that the Mayans invented the number 100, that he's referencing to 2012?
- [1] is unreliable (whereas this is better), and so is this. Both of those are strictly based off user-generated content. Now, that one in the middle is fine, but I would think you could use the Nielsen information itself (i.e. from their own reports or their site) to verify that.
- Conclusions
On hold pending some improvements to the above issues, and hopefully some more substantive stuff can show up to rectify the coverage issues. Otherwise, I am leaning towards failing this GA nomination primairly on the basis of WP:GACR#3a. I'll keep it on hold for about a week and see what develops. –MuZemike 22:56, 9 December 2011 (UTC)
Failed – I'm sorry, but I'm going to have to fail this GAN due to the issues above, which have not been addressed. Please work on them before considering another GA nomination. --MuZemike 05:10, 23 December 2011 (UTC)