Talk:Papa Oppong/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 20:04, 2 November 2015 (UTC)

I'll have this to you soon JAGUAR  20:04, 2 November 2015 (UTC)

Initial comments

• The lead is a bit short for an article this size, and needs to summarise the article per WP:LEAD

Added a very descriptive lead.

• "Oppong attended Blessed Mother Teresa Catholic Secondary School in Scarborough" - can Scarborough be linked?

Scarborough is already linked earlier in the section.

• "Oppong was absent for the Colonels' five next games" - "Colonel" hasn't been explained prior to this

Added "Eastern Kentucky Colonels" earlier in the section.

• "as Eastern Kentucky dominated West Virginia Wesleyan College" - dominated sounds informal

Changed to "easily defeated"

• "to help Eastern Kentucky eke past Jacksonville State" - 'eke'?

Fixed.

• "However, his team won the game to claim the title" - which title?

Fixed.

References

• The toolserver picked up a few errors but they seemed to work fine, although refs 7 and 8 didn't work for me?

I do not think those links exist anymore. I have added new links that include the same information.

On hold

Well done with the work put into this article, I couldn't find anything wrong with it other than a couple of confusing sentences which could be clarified. Once the issues above are addressed then this should be good to go JAGUAR  23:03, 2 November 2015 (UTC)

I have addressed the issues you pointed out. Let me know if you have any other concerns. TempleM (talk) 21:57, 3 November 2015 (UTC)

Nice work with the lead! Looks like this is getting on its way to the FA criteria. With all of the issues addressed, this is all good to go. JAGUAR  22:07, 3 November 2015 (UTC)