Talk:Pilot (Modern Family)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 00:52, 1 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

The show is just about to come on here, so I'll watch it to get a feel for the show myself, then will do the review. Pretty short article so it'll be reviewed in the next couple hours. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 00:52, 1 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Well, the show seems really good, so maybe I'll watch it regularly. Anyway, here's the review:

The production section, compared to other GAs, is weak. If anything the pilot should have a quite nice production section given that it's the first episode and we don't know how it's been made yet. Follow the examples in Pilot (Fringe) and Pilot (Veronica Mars), though you don't necessarily have to do into the detail of the latter.
"Cameron offers to pay for the headsets of all the passengers." Why? That seems rather jarring and I'm wondering where these headsets suddenly came from when reading this. The final couple sentences in that paragraph could be tweaked to flow better.
"Haley brings her boyfriend upstairs but gets very annoyed when her mother Claire keeps watching them. Haley goes downstairs to complain to Phil who accidentally shoots Luke, Hayley's friend and then himself." with a gun? I'm a little confused as to what exactly is happening here.

I'll put the article on hold. Expand upon that section over the next 5 days and I'll give that section a review. If no progress is made I'll fail the article. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 03:03, 1 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Actually, after thinking this over, I'm going to fail this as a GA. It's been worked on a little bit, but after reading over pilot episodes it's going to take a lot of work to get this to GA status. It can be re-nommed when the production section is of quality. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 00:08, 5 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]