Talk:Serbian State Guard/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Dank (talk · contribs) 03:11, 24 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I'll have a look at this in the morning. - Dank (push to talk) 03:11, 24 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"Higher SS and Police Leader": It's generally better to link an entire proper noun: Higher SS and Police Leader (here and also in the text)
"As part of its role, it assisted the Germans to impose ...": Omit the first part: "It assisted the Germans in imposing ..."
"a military government. This was due to the key rail ...": a military government, to exploit the key rail ...
"(Serbo-Croatian: Vlada Nacionalnog Spasa, Влада Националног Спаса)": The question here is whether the reader is likely to know this is supposed to be Serbo-Croatian ... since you mention it in the lead, they probably will know (and you omit mention of the language later on), so omit "Serbo-Croatian" here.
"five regions (oblast)": Okay, my Serbo-Croatian is a little rusty :) But isn't oblast singular? It should be plural here. Likewise for "three districts (okrug)".
"It was royalist in sympathy, pro-Chetnik, and was rapidly infiltrated by Chetniks loyal to Draža Mihailović, did not have enough officers, and after some initial successes, was never an effective military force.": That could be clearer.
"executing or delivering to the Germans for execution people from those groups": executing people from those groups or delivering them to the Germans for execution
"the SDS had reduced": the SDS had been reduced, or declined
"the 'worst troops in the world'.": double quote marks
"the either the": either the
Alphabetize the book references.
I'm not the best on whether this covers "major aspects", but my understanding is that will be covered at A-class.
The "toolbox" above reports no problems.
- Thanks Dan. All addressed. You might like to check that my sentence structure and grammar changes are up to snuff. Thanks for the review! Regards, Peacemaker67 (send... over) 03:11, 25 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  - Happy to help. Your edits check out, and I made three tweaks ... have a look. I'm going to look at a few other articles before signing off on "major aspects". - Dank (push to talk) 13:28, 25 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]
    - Copy. PRODUCER jumped in and made a couple of syntax tweaks, all edits ok with me.Peacemaker67 (send... over) 23:01, 25 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Otherwise:

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose quality: Yes

B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists: Yes
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. Has an appropriate reference section: Yes

B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary: Yes

C. No original research: Yes
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects: Yes

B. Focused: Yes
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias: Yes
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc: Yes
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content: Yes. Images are good.

B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions: Yes
Overall:
Pass or Fail: Pass. - Dank (push to talk) 02:15, 27 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks Dan! Peacemaker67 (send... over) 02:16, 27 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]