Talk:Slamet Rijadi/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Thurgate (talk · contribs) 14:38, 10 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
prose: (MoS):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Comments

1. and national hero. Suggest - and a national hero.

Trimmed as it is explained in detail in the fourth paragraph

2. mysticism. Suggest - Wiki link

Wikilinked

3. Japanese occupation of the Indies. Suggest - Japanese occupation of Indonesia

Wasn't formally called Indonesia at the time; the Dutch still insisted on calling the country the Dutch East Indies. I've trimmed the country name as it is implied from context.

4. Numerous things have been named after Rijadi. The 5.8-kilometre (3.6 mi) long main road of Surakarta is named after the brigadier general.[14] A frigate, described as "one of the most sophisticated frigates" in the Indonesian Navy, is named after him.[15] Suggest - Following his death Rijadi has had numerous things named after him such as the 5.8-kilometre (3.6 mi) long main road of Surakarta and also a Indonesian navy frigate. - What frigate?

Added.

5. The bibliography and footnotes subsections are the wrong way round.

Is that based on policy? Both Chrisye and 1740 Batavia massacre (two FAs I've written) use this format.

Sorry poor wording I meant that you had the footnotes as the section header for you're biblography, but I've changed it so its all good.

I've put the article on hold for seven days to allow you to address the issues I've brought up. Feel free to contact me on my talk page, or here with any concerns. Thurgate (talk) 14:38, 10 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review, I've replied above. Crisco 1492 (talk) 14:57, 10 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Passed. Good job Crisco. Thurgate (talk) 15:35, 10 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks a lot for the review! Crisco 1492 (talk) 15:40, 10 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]