Talk:Sojourner (rover)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: CactiStaccingCrane (talk · contribs) 06:59, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Content feedback

Tone

• Some sentences should be more neutral.
  • Maybe you can point me to the problematic sentences? Artem.G (talk) 17:27, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
    • Actually, nevermind, there's nothing wrong with the tone. My bad CactiStaccingCrane (talk)

Formatting & styling

• Adding small text for credits to rover designers is not in line with Wikipedia's manual of style. You might want to merge it to prose.
  • I will think about it, it seems that I saw it in some GA about a spacecraft. Artem.G (talk) 17:27, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
  • I've created 'Key personnel' section, so it's Y. Artem.G (talk) 10:04, 1 October 2021 (UTC)
• Coordinates of landing should be replaced by name of relative location in Mars.
  • Y
• Some lone-sentences should be merged to paragraphs.
  • I'll check it.
    • mostly Y, if you think I've missed smth, please point me to it. Artem.G (talk) 10:04, 1 October 2021 (UTC)
• Elements names don't need to be labeled with it's element symbol. This problem is fixed by me, Cacti. Y
• Some grammar mistakes are seen, although most of them are very minor. Some of the typo is fixed by me, Cacti.
  • Thanks for that! Artem.G (talk) 17:27, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

Other than that, the article is very well done! Great job! CactiStaccingCrane (talk) 07:58, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

Thanks for your review! I am mostly offline till the end of the month, but I will definitely address all the points you mentioned. I'll ping you when everything will be resolved. Artem.G (talk) 17:27, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

• CactiStaccingCrane (talk · contribs), I think that everything is done, please look through it when you have time. Artem.G (talk) 10:04, 1 October 2021 (UTC)
  • Well, I think that this article is a now, great job! (Also, I like the amount of detail of the article as a space nerd :)) CactiStaccingCrane (talk) 10:16, 1 October 2021 (UTC)

    @Artem.G Here you go, I have edited the article to show the icon and the wikiproject assessment. CactiStaccingCrane (talk) 10:20, 1 October 2021 (UTC)

    • Thanks a lot, it was my first attempt of writing a GA, and it took a lot of time :) Artem.G (talk) 10:41, 1 October 2021 (UTC)

      • • Well, I think you should aim for the next big thing, which is . It is the highest article class you can achieve. Here's the page about it: Wikipedia:Featured articles. I personally have an article that I'm trying to get as well, so you have a company :) CactiStaccingCrane (talk) 12:56, 1 October 2021 (UTC)