Talk:Solar urticaria/GA1

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To save the reviewer time, ref # 8 is broken. ₪Ceran →(cheer→chime →carol) 00:56, 8 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

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WP:Lead criteria not met. Should be 3-4 paragraphs and summarize the article. There is much information in the lead which is not in the body of the text.
It says "4% of patients with photosensitive disorders are reported to have been diagnosed with solar urticaria" Now not knowing how common photosensitivity disorders I have no idea how common this is in the general population.
There are lots of good reviews on this topic. www.pubmed.com. See if you can get a copy at your local university. Or I might be able pull one up online :-)

Botto NC, Warshaw EM (2008). "Solar urticaria". J. Am. Acad. Dermatol. 59 (6): 909–20, quiz 921–2. doi:10.1016/j.jaad.2008.08.020. PMID 19022098. {{cite journal}}: Unknown parameter |month= ignored (help)

This page is missing multiple sections ( including classification, history, social and cultural ) See WP:MED

There is still a lot of work to be done for this to become a well rounded article. I recommend you look at other good articles and featured articles to get an idea of what you are trying to achieve. See water fluoridation for example.

Cheers --Doc James (talk · contribs · email) 17:21, 15 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]

GA review

I have not passed this article at this point. Mainly due to a limited overview of the condition. Missing a number of important sections. Also the lead speaks about much that the body of the text does not. And finally it would be preferred if the article was primarily referenced to peer reviewed journal published reviews. Abstracts can be found at www.pubmed.com and full copies are sometime available on line but often need to be obtained through a university.

--Doc James (talk · contribs · email) 17:53, 15 January 2009 (UTC)[reply]