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Reviewer: Tkbrett (talk · contribs) 01:32, 19 May 2021 (UTC)
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Staking my claim on reviewing this article. Tkbrett (✉) 01:32, 19 May 2021 (UTC)
Lead
[edit]- "It was later chosen by RCA Records as the first single from the album" can be made active as "RCA Records later chose it as the first single from the album"
- "the song began as an idea": as opposed to? Make this a little more specific.
- "being aided by" -> "aided by"
- link BBC
- "Critically, "Sound and Vision" has been regarded by music critics and biographers as one of Bowie's greatest songs." -> "Music critics and biographers have regarded "Sound and Vision" as one of Bowie's greatest songs."
Writing and recording
[edit]- "Sound and Vision" was co-produced by David Bowie and Tony Visconti" -> "David Bowie and Tony Visconti co-produced "Sound and Vision""
- pipe Descending fifths sequence
- link G major
- pipe Melody
- "and was described by biographer David Buckley" -> "later described by biographer David Buckley"
Composition
[edit]- pipe crooner
- link Sizzle cymbal
- pipe Bar (music)
Release
[edit]- avoid duplicating the word "presented" in the same sentence. Perhaps simply: "When Bowie presented his 11th studio album Low to RCA Records, it shocked the label."
- "The label were intimidated by Bowie, who persuaded the label to release" -> "Bowie intimidated the label, persuading them to release"
Images
[edit]- Good.
Referencing
[edit]- copyvio gives a 96.2% score due to a Wiki copycat. The next is 25.4%, indicating there are no concerns for this page.
- Checking against sources where able, the page is properly sourced.
Final comments and verdict
[edit]On hold: I think this was the first Bowie song I heard when I was a teenager, so I'm happy to see it get such a nicely written page. Once the few above concerns are addressed I'll be happy to give it a pass. Tkbrett (✉) 13:08, 20 May 2021 (UTC)
- Tkbrett All done. Thanks for the kind words and th quick review! Please let me know if the "began as an idea" rewrite doesn't look good. – zmbro (talk) 18:02, 20 May 2021 (UTC)
pass: Zmbro, yes, I think that reads a lot better. All thanks to you for making this such an easy review. :) Tkbrett (✉) 19:32, 20 May 2021 (UTC)
- Tkbrett Thanks again! :-) – zmbro (talk) 21:28, 20 May 2021 (UTC)