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GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Spice (Perfume song)/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 03:00, 19 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

You can remove the caption since it's the only artwork available for the single
The album page is "JPN (album)", not "JPN (Perfume album)"; please change

Lead

Paragraph 1

The album link for JPN links to Japan instead of the album; please fix
Add the sentence "It premiered on November 2, 2011 as the fifth and final single from the album in Japan." before "It was written, composed, arranged, and produced by Japanese musician and Capsule member Yasutaka Nakata." please
Who described it as a house song?

Paragraph 2

Add "both" after "number two on"
Remove "shifting" in "It was certified gold by the Recording Industry Association of Japan (RIAJ) for shifting physical shipments of 100,000 units."

Background and composition

Paragraph 1

You use "Alongside th..." twice within three sentences, could you switch one of them to a different word? Variety is great!
Reword "The single also included the B-side track "Glitter", which an album remix appeared on the parent album." please
The last sentence should include that it was released as digital download here

Paragraph 2

Change "The cover artwork was photographed by Japanese photographer Hiroshi Nomura; the CD and DVD formats features the girls sitting on a circle window.[3][6]" to "The cover artwork was photographed by Japanese photographer Hiroshi Nomura and features the girls sitting on a circle window.[3][6]" please
"Jpopgo.co.uk" --> "J-Pop Go"

Critical response

Mention that Paul Browne also thought it was one of the best songs on the album; this sentence and the one before it are almost identical in structure–you could reword it for a bit of a difference/change-up
"Jpopgo.co.uk" --> "J-Pop Go"
Change "A staff editor from CD Journal was positive in their review; they complimented the composition and Nakata's composition.[7]" to "A staff editor from CD Journal was positive with the review, complimenting Nakata's composition.[7]"
See, if you list a person as a "staff editor", but it is unknown what sex the editor is, you're supposed to use "his/her", and not "their" since "their" is plural, not singular; so sentences or statements that use both "staff editor" and "their" need to be reworded to be grammatically correct.
Change the last sentence to "Ian Martin from The Japan Times was particularly negative in his review, labelling the song an "otherwise unremarkable closing number..."[10]"

Commercial performance

Add a topic sentence to this section, demonstrating the success of "Spice"
Add an apostrophe in "groups" --> "group's"
Change "The following week, the single fell outside the top ten to number 13; it sold 7,136 units in its second week of sales.[12]" to "The following week, the single fell outside the top ten to number 13, selling 7,136 units.[12]"
Change "It lasted for 10 weeks on the chart, selling 90,471 units by the end of 2011.[13]" to "It lasted for 10 weeks on the chart, totaling 90,471 units by the end of 2011.[13]"
Change "shifting" to a different word please

Music video

Paragraph 1

"groups" --> "group's"
Remove the comma after JPN please

Synopsis

Outstanding

Promotion and live performances

Remove the commas around "and its B-side track" please
Change the link for "TBS" to "Tokyo Broadcasting System" please
De-capitalize "It’s" after the quotation mark please
"group" --> "group's"

Track listing

Pluralize section title please to "Track listings and formats'

Charts and certifications

Certification

The information about sales figures, shipments, and unspecified figures is unnecessary as none of those symbols appears in the chart itself; please remove them

End of GA Review:

Outstanding work! Your writing style has really improved. Standard procedure; on hold for seven days. Thanks! Carbrera (talk) 03:03, 23 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Carbrera: All done :) Regarding the point about the "staff editor" sex gender thing, thanks for the pointer! Will continue this :) Regarding the certifications table, I kept it because it's kind of necessary to the article. (P.S. nice to see you back again :) ). CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs} 03:44, 23 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for being so quick and thorough with your changes! I just reviewed the changes log and it looks perfect. Thanks for your kind words. Carbrera (talk) 03:47, 23 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]