Talk:Squatting in Namibia/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 00:37, 1 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Hello again, Mujinga! I will get to this within seven days. Please note that I am returning to GA reviewing after an hiatus, so please WP:TROUT me if I make a mistake. Thanks, ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 00:37, 1 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Hello hello - from tomorrow my internet access will be intermittent for a week but I should still be checking in. Looking forward to your comments, Mujinga (talk) 11:00, 1 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Noted! Feel free to take some time. :) ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 17:34, 3 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

There we are; on hold for now. My comments are below. ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 18:06, 3 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for them, I've answered on everything - Mujinga (talk) 16:17, 4 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Awesome work! I am now very pleased to pass yet another great squatting-related article. Congrats! ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 01:40, 5 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Copyvio

Earwig says good to go.

Files

Good to go; Cloudy heaven.jpg is on Commons under CC-BY SA 4.0; Slum u Swakopmundu - panoramio.jpg is on Commons under CC-BY SA 3.0; Informal settlement Freedom Square in Gobabis Namibia 1.jpg is on Commons under CC-BY SA 4.0.

Prose

In the lead, wikilink informal settlements.
done Mujinga (talk) 20:55, 3 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"and thus the concept of squatting thus did not apply." – remove one of the thuses to avoid redundancy.
good spot! Mujinga (talk) 20:55, 3 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"to do this was subsequently made illegal" – any idea when?
yes it was the Native Administrations Proclamation of 1922 - in mentioning that, I rejigged things a bit, I think it's better now, thanks for the inspiration! Mujinga (talk) 16:16, 4 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]
That looks much better! ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 01:40, 5 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"ten bantustans were established, the remaining" – recommend "ten bantustans were established, and the remaining"
yes that's better Mujinga (talk) 15:32, 4 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"one of the biggest goals" – suggest largest because it sounds slightly more formal IMO.
changed! Mujinga (talk) 15:32, 4 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"so as to allow construction" – I believe it should be "so as to allow the construction" due to the highway being the singular subject.
i rephrased, hope it reads better now Mujinga (talk) 21:06, 3 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"and 8,090 at Gobabis" – why not in like the other settlements?
it reads ok to me, but happy to change to "in" Mujinga (talk) 15:31, 4 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]
No, that is fine with me! ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 01:40, 5 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]
I would rename § Legal to § Legality.
done Mujinga (talk) 15:31, 4 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"saying it had not" – 'it' being?
it is the challenge, I've rejigged because it was garbled, no wonder it was confusing Mujinga (talk) 15:30, 4 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

References

Passes spotcheck on refs 1, 3, 12 and 13.

Recommend a citation template for ref 3.
done Mujinga (talk) 15:28, 4 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]
It seems The Namibian changed their URLs because all of their citations are dead; mark them as dead or if possible try to find and link their new URLs.
hmm yeah that's annoying - I've replaced the links except "Squatters bemoan empty election promises" which I've marked as dead Mujinga (talk) 15:28, 4 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Noted. ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 01:40, 5 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

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