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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 08:22, 7 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]


Comments

  • "the WSPU (Women's Social and Political Union)" other way round first mention, i.e. the Women's Social and Political Union (WSPU)
  • "appointed by the Women's Social and Political Union (WSPU) as a travelling..." umm.. just use the unlinked abbreviation here.
  • Probably worth contextualising who H. H. Asquith was for readers who may not be aware that he was nearly the PM at that time.
  • "She died of cancer on 21 October 1964" unless somehow notable, we don't normally "do" deaths in the lead.
  • "at The Women's Library' The isn't part of the title.
  • "Lancashire on 15' comma after Lancs.
  • "subsidisdised" I say, what?
  • Could link Blackburn (since you linked Preston).
  • "school aged 13, became an" +she.
  • "hatmaking trade" isn't that more encyclopedically known as millinery? Or hat-making.
  • in Manchester.[4] In Manchester" repetitive. And link perhaps.
  • "the Manchester University" well, either no "the" or (preferably), the University of Manchester.
  • "a travelling speakers" just one.
  • "the Labour Party[9] " full stop.
  • "outside of H. H. Asquith's home" see above. Even just British member of parliament?
  • "1875/6"1875/76.
  • "the Liberal" link.
  • Was the Huddersfield by-election this one? Could link.
  • "1907, Emmeline Pankhurst suspended" overlinked.
  • "the billiard company" link billiard.
  • Why sub for her husband in 1923?
  • " the Second World War " you just had World War I, so be consistent.
  • "Her articles critical" +were
  • "then common (attacks on property, for example), " -> "then common, such as attacks on property,"
  • "held at The Women's Library" the Women's Library.
  • Link and italics for Oxford Dictionary of National Biography.
  • "p.295 " p. 295.
  • Ref 4, en-dash.
  • Ref 6 too, and pp.
  • ref 11, en-dashes, not spaced hyphens.
  • Ref 15 en-dash.
  • Check all other page ranges are separated by en-dash.
  • ISBNs could use consistency.

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 12:38, 7 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks, The Rambling Man. I've amended the article in line with your review comments, with notes on a few points above. Let me know if anything else is required. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 14:29, 7 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]