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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 22:00, 11 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]


I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 22:00, 11 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

  • No DABs, external links OK
  • Thanks!
  • Image appropriately licensed.
  • Thanks!
  • local common schools What's a common school?
  • I've wiki-linked the mentions of common schools in both the lede and the prose to Common school for context.
  • Melvin was appointed to his First Judicial District circuit judge seat "Reappointed" might be in order here.
  • This has been changed. Thanks for the suggestion!
  • Link bar, WV first Judicial Circuit, circuit judge, private, Dept. of West Virginia, company, prosecuting attorney, primary and secondary schools,
  • Bar, circuit judge, prosecuting attorney, primary and secondary schools, private, company have all been wiki-linked; WV first Judicial Circuit and Dept. of West Virginia do not yet have articles to link to.
  • served as an accredited delegate Were there other kinds of delegates?
  • There was not so I've removed "accredited" from the lede and the prose.
  • Partisan should probably be plural.
  • Done! Let me know if I didn't pluralize it in the right place.
  • Melvin served first as an orderly sergeant and then as a first lieutenant of his company.[1][3] In August 1861, Melvin Use a pronoun every once in a while.
  • Done! Let me know if there are any other instances where this should be done.
  • discharged with brevets from the Union Army This doesn't make sense; brevets were associated with a rank. The infobox says brevetted colonel. If this is correct than add it to the main body as his last rank mentioned is captain.
  • This has been incorporated. Thanks for the suggestion.
  • Following the war in the fall of 1865 The first bit is redundant, we already know that the war was over.
  • Done!
  • despite his residency in Brooke County tell the reader that Wellsburg is in Brook Co.
  • Done!
  • One year terms as Attorney General?
  • Yes sir, at that time. I've added this to the text.
  • His resignation only a few weeks after election seems very suspicious to me. Any evidence that it was done to allow the governor to appoint his replacement?
  • It could have been, and I've thought the same thing, but I was not able to find references to corroborate our suspicion.
  • With a little help from Corinne, the pronoun shortage has been rectified. There's one more issue that doesn't affect this review; you've got some overlinking going on. Generally, you only should link on the first usage of a term. This script will help catch them more easily than manually checking for them yourself.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:46, 17 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]