Talk:Typhoon Robyn/GA1

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 04:43, 14 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"The typhoon briefly tracked south before veering to the northwest while intensifying." - You stated here and in the MH that the typhoon briefly tracked southward. I'm not seeing anywhere in the track where it made a southward turn (well, maybe by a hair). I'm thinking either the track is wrong, the report is wrong, you accidentally added the wrong direction, or one of us needs to see an eye doctor :P
- Changed. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 19:42, 14 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"Robyn attained its peak intensity of 160 km/h (100 mph), with a barometric pressure of 945 mbar (27.9 inHg)." - The infobox says 940 though
- Fixed. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 19:42, 14 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
List South Korea and Russian Far East in the areas affected on the infobox
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane
"At 06:00 UTC on July 30, the Joint Typhoon Warning Center (JTWC)" - Wikilink Coordinated Universal Time
- Fixed. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:42, 14 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
Why do some monetary values have Yen symbols (¥) but others don't?
- They all should have the symbol. As for why it never happened, I didn't start using the yen symbol in articles till after I wrote this 11.5 months ago. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane
"Nationwide, damage was estimated at ¥10.3 billion or US$92.3 million.[17][18][19][20][21][22][23][24][25][26][27]" - Do you really need 11 references there? Usually when there's more than about five or six references cited together, they are bundled like this
- I do because each reference a damage total in one particular area of sorts. I'll look into bundling them because I probably should do that. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 19:42, 14 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  - Given the references are use elsewhere, I'm not sure how bundling them would work. How would the other references be changed? YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 23:50, 14 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
    - I didn't realize that all of those refs are used more than once already. It also sounds like you've never done that before. Things could get pretty confusing, since those refs are very similar to each other. I'm going to just let this go--12george1 (talk) 16:22, 16 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"a 38-year-old in Karatsu was servery wounded." ---> "a 38-year-old in Karatsu was severely wounded."
"Five people, including three seniors and one child," - Seniors? Are we talking about high school seniors, college seniors, or senior citizens?
- Given the context, it should be pretty clear honestly, in the same sense that if you go to a museum of sorts and say "3 adults, 1 senior, and 1 child" would be clear. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:42, 14 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  - Fair enough--12george1 (talk) 16:22, 16 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
That's a rather large three paragraph for Japan. I'd suggest maybe that from this sentence onward would be a fourth paragraph: "Roughly 30,000 people lost power due to downed trees in the city of Ōita."
- That's probably a good idea. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:38, 14 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"dropped heavy rainfall to the northernmost island" ---> "dropped heavy rainfall on the northernmost island of Hokkaido."
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane
I noticed that you don't have rainfall totals for South Korea. I found two here
- Will add, hold on. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:38, 14 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"Japan Meteorological Agency (October 10, 1992). RSMC Best Track Data – 1990–1999" - The publication date can't possibly be 1992 and definitely no earlier than November 1999
- Okay, this requires some explanation. CB was the first person to ever really start doing pre-2000 WPAC systems with a serious intention. After he did some storms in 1989, I cut and pasted his referencing style when I first started doing 80s articles (and included a link to the 80-89 JMA text file). When I started doing 90s WPAC typhoons a little under two years ago, I cut and pasted the same ref format I used in the 80s without any changes. I'll look into this. YE ^Pacific ^Hurricane 19:42, 14 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  - - Due to lack of verification, the date is being removed. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:38, 14 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]
"typhoon causes deaths, damage in south korea". Xinhua General News Service. August 11, 1990." - Again, you've got the wrong year here. I'm assuming you meant to say 1993. Also, why all lowercase letters in the title?
- Fixed the year; the title was provided in lowercase letters from the source. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 19:42, 14 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

That should be it for this review--12george1 (talk) 04:43, 14 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 23:14, 14 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I will now pass this article. Good job!--12george1 (talk) 16:22, 16 May 2019 (UTC)[reply]