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Reviewer: Dank (talk · contribs) 00:50, 25 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Review

  • The toolbox checks out.
  • "The ship was intermittently in commission from 1872 to 1877 before she was permanently decommissioned that latter year.": The ship was intermittently in commission from 1872 until she was permanently decommissioned in 1877. - Dank (push to talk) 00:50, 25 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The base of the funnel (ship)": ?
  • "to protected the crew": to protect the crew
  • "The contract for Canonicus, the first Navy ship to be named Canonicus, a chief of the Narragansett Indians": ... the first Navy ship to be named for the chief of the Narragansett Indians
  • "and fired 144 rounds over both day's action": and fired 144 rounds
  • "She was hit at least 38 times in return, but was only lightly damaged and three crewmen were wounded.": She was hit at least 38 times in return but was only lightly damaged, and three crewmen were wounded.
  • "was ordered to join the South Atlantic Blockading Squadron. and arrived at Charleston on 19 January": delete the period
  • "Canonicus's": Canonicus
  • Otherwise:
GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
    - Dank (push to talk) 02:08, 25 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

All done, but can you explain this one for me? "She was hit at least 38 times in return, but was only lightly damaged and three crewmen were wounded.": She was hit at least 38 times in return but was only lightly damaged, and three crewmen were wounded. Almost invariably the "but" should be proceeded by a comma, why not this time?--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 19:10, 27 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Comma usage with "but" is quite similar to usage with "and", and if that were an "and", it would be fine to put a comma in front of it, or not. Most style guides recommend separating independent clauses (such as "three crewmen were wounded") with a comma in general, but particularly when there's another comma nearby, and particularly in longer sentences. - Dank (push to talk) 19:27, 27 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Passed. - Dank (push to talk) 19:35, 27 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]