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Reviewer: Tomica (talk · contribs) 17:27, 13 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

There is one disambiguation link (One and One) and reference number 50 is dead. Fix/Remove them. — Tomica (talk) 11:58, 14 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
 Fixed - Saulo Talk to Me 02:43, 11 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Infobox
  • No issues
Lead
  • "Un-Break My Heart" received mixed reviews from music critics; however, it won a Grammy Award for Best Female Pop Vocal Performance in 1997. ---> Explain why it got mixed reviews, (you can maybe write, Music critics were divided on the songs [explain why]) and then in other sentence say that it won the award. — Tomica (talk) 11:58, 14 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • It also reached number one in Austria, Belgium (Waloonia), Europe, Sweden and Switzerland, while reaching the top five on several European countries. --> In Europe, the song reached the top-five in more than ten countries while peaking at number one in Austria, Belgium (Wallonia), Sweden and Switzerland. — Tomica (talk) 11:58, 14 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • An accompanying music video was directed by Billie Woodruff, and portrays Braxton mourning on the death of her lover, while remembering the good times they had together. ---> Billie Woodruff directed the accompanying video for the single. It portrays Braxton mourning on the death of her lover, while remembering the good times they had together. — Tomica (talk) 11:58, 14 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Braxton also performed the song --> Braxton performed the song... — Tomica (talk) 11:58, 14 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Background
  • "Un-Break My Heart" was written by Diane Warren in 1995. When asked about her songwriting process, she said that songs usually come to her from a title, a chorus or a drum beat. --> Are these sentences taken from reference #1? Or some other? Because they are unsourced. — Tomica (talk) 11:58, 14 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Warren wrote the song "as both a balland and a dance tune, as that's the way I heard it;" ---> sounds awkward. I suggest: Warren further explained that she wrote "Un-Break My Heart" as a ballad and dance song, because that was the way she heard it. — Tomica (talk) 11:58, 14 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • The songwriter then played the finished song to Arista Records president Clive Davis, who thought it would be perfect for Braxton's album ---> When Warren played the finished song to Arista Records' president Clive Davis, he thought that the song would fit Braxton's then upcoming album. — Tomica (talk) 11:58, 14 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • The track was then sent to the singer, who expressed her dislike for the song. ---> When the "Un-Break My Heart" was sent to Braxton, she expressed dislike for the song. — Tomica (talk) 11:58, 14 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • However, the singer talked to Warren following the sessions, and said that she did not wanted another heartbreak track. ---> Following the recording sessions of the song, Braxton talked to Warren and explained why she was skeptical about recording it, with further explanation that she didn't want another "heartbreak track". (Also place these before where the song was recorded, it will read better with the rest of the paragraph).— Tomica (talk) 20:59, 16 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Composition ---> Composition and remixes
  • ...power ballad that lasts for four minutes and twenty seconds. ---> power ballad with a length of four minutes and twenty seconds. 18:02, 17 May 2012 (UTC)
  •  Done I have a question. Is it really necessary to say "according to a music sheet..."? wouldn't just say "the song is composed in..." directly. It is backed by the reference anyway. --Hahc21 (talk) 19:57, 17 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • According to sheet music published by Realsongs at musicnotes.com, "Un-Break My Heart" is composed in the key of B minor and is set in time signature of common time with a moderately slow tempo of 55 beats per minute, while Braxton' vocal range spans from the low-key of D3 to the high-note of D5. ---> Make two separate sentences from this. — Tomica (talk) 18:02, 17 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Critical response
Chart Performance
Make the main paragraph Promotion and then sub-paragraphs Music video and Live Performances
Covers
Track listings
Charts
Chart procession and succession should go after the references.
Why? --Hahc21 [TALK][CONTRIBS] 20:42, 23 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Notes (not sure if that's the right name)


All in all
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Progress

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Hi! Hey if you need any help on reviewing the article you can tell me. I'm also a reviewer and Good articles mentor. --Hahc21 (talk) 23:33, 29 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Yes please. I don't have time to review it, since my exams are coming soon. Can you help me? — Tomica (talk) 08:22, 30 April 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Of course... I was reviewing Live at Wembley but i'm done on that... :) --Hahc21 (talk) 14:11, 2 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Hey, are you still doing review? If you are not able to continue because of timing, you can let me finish the job and contact the contributors to finish the review... if you like, of course. --Hahc21 (talk) 06:32, 10 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Please continue, I have time now to fix the issues. - Saulo Talk to Me 11:30, 15 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I will continue tonight. — Tomica (talk) 12:31, 15 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Ok, i'll be in touch to bring all the help i can. --Hahc21 (talk) 04:13, 16 May 2012 (UTC)[reply]
What happened to the review? No form of progress appears to have been made in over two weeks over one week. Till I Go Home talk edits 02:10, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I was on my GA vacation doing a thorough review of the GA criteria and related stuff, so i stoped working on GA. About Tomica and the nominator, i have no idea... --Hahc21 [TALK][CONTRIBS] 02:23, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Obviously I finished the review. I am waiting for Saulo to resolve the queries. — Tomica (talk) 09:06, 2 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
If Saulo doesn't make the final fixes in the next few days, then the article should be failed; he's been given long enough. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 02:03, 10 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I'm sorry it took me so long and it bothered you guys. I'm adding the release history and it will finally be finished. - Saulo Talk to Me 02:31, 11 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I think everything has been finally fixed. :) - Saulo Talk to Me 02:51, 11 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]