Talk:Varan/GA1

GA Review

Passed. grungaloo (talk) 00:19, 7 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: Grungaloo (talk · contribs) 01:52, 3 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Paleface Jack, I'm going to take this review on. I'll probably make copyedits as I go, so please review those and revert if you disagree with any. Otherwise I'll ping you once I've finished. grungaloo (talk) 01:52, 3 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Grungaloo Thanks. That sounds good. Paleface Jack (talk) 01:55, 3 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Paleface Jack, I've finished my review. Let me know if you have any questions about anything I've wrote. grungaloo (talk) 16:33, 3 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hi again Paleface Jack, the changes look good and I think this is ready for GA. Congrats!

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
Layout is good, ~~a few minor prose issues (see comments).~~ Prose issues addressed
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
No copyvio found using Earwig, no OR/Syn, and ref section exists. ~~A few iffy sources that could use an alt source to be safe, and one unreliable one which needs to be removed. See comments below.~~ Uses reliable sources and spot check aside from that is good.
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
Good coverage, not too detailed. Nothing seems to be missing from what I can see in the sources.
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
Meets NPOV
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
No stability issues
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Good use of images, appropriately licensed and captioned
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Comments

Refs 6,13,40,45,49,72 all good
[1] - I found this on Commons, not a GA requirement but could be useful in the Physical Appearance section since it shows close-up detail.

I might leave it as it is as there might be an imbalance of varan images if I do that.--Paleface Jack (talk) 21:19, 3 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

When the Japanese Defence Force (JSDF) arrives - Should this be "Japanese Self-Defence Force"? Otherwise the initialization doesn't fit.

Done.--Paleface Jack (talk) 17:17, 3 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Other media section - All the sentences start with some variation of "Varan appeared in". Could be changed to be less repetitious

I did a little tinkering with it but I feel like it needs more work. Any suggestions?--Paleface Jack (talk) 17:17, 3 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

My thought is, due to how closely tied the character's appearances in other media is concerned, I might just cite and mention some of the appearances and place a see also for Godzilla in game article for more info to cut down on the scope. Would that be a better way of handling this? Paleface Jack (talk) 17:55, 3 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry, I'm referring to the "Other media" subsection where you mention things like what video game they appeared in. It's a pretty minor gripe and not something I would hold up GA over, so your call on how/if you want to address it. I think the description of the appearance is well written so no need to change that. grungaloo (talk) 17:58, 3 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

That was what I was meaning. It is not a huge concern, but I have not found any alternate for the Gamespot source so, sadly, it will be removed. Paleface Jack (talk) 21:16, 3 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

GameSpot as a source (ref 32) - GameSpot is only reliable if it's staff generated content, but this appears to be used generated. Could you please find an alternate source?

I will see what I can do.--Paleface Jack (talk) 17:18, 3 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Removed Gamespot reference Paleface Jack (talk) 17:43, 6 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Varan was also considered for the main antagonist in the final film of the Heisei series. - Could you explain what the Heisei series is here? It's not been mentioned yet in the article.

Did a little bit of that.--Paleface Jack (talk) 17:17, 3 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Standing at fifty meters in height, and weighing fifteen thousand metric tons, - Add Template:Converts to imperial measurements

Done.--Paleface Jack (talk) 21:14, 3 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

In the Japanese reference book Godzilla Giant Monsters Super Encyclopedia, Varan is listed as being able to glide at up to speeds of Mach 1.5. - Calling it a "Japanese" reference book sounds odd because it's not a reference book about Japan. I would just say "In Godzilla Giant Monsters Super Encyclopedia, Varan is..."

Done.--Paleface Jack (talk) 21:14, 3 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Legacy - Screen Rant is flagged as a marginally reliable source, I think its use here is ok, but are you able to find an alternate source to corroborate Varan's popularity?

it seems like that is the only one so far. I will keep looking--Paleface Jack (talk) 21:55, 3 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I rewrote it going from an additional souce talking obout the character's longevity before it goes into the screenrant source, so it can be removed if problematic.--Paleface Jack (talk) 17:37, 6 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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